Visitor in my own body Poem, by sunset, at My poetic side

Visitor in my body

Thoughts are twisting in my head

On why my brain is not normal

Why i can't stop being so over dramatic

Or why when something small goes wrong

It's the end of the world

There is a darkness shadowing above me

And i feel like i don't have a torch

And im stumbling and crying

And calling and shouting

But i am drowned out by those above

I want people to care

But i don't want them to see

The darkness that frightens me

Because it hurts i crave attention

And im only worthy because of their praise

Why is that so hard to understand

You think you encourage me

By saying that

someone is better than me

Or that I'm not useful

So i might as well be gone

But don't you see how much that hurts me

Because without you

And your rare kind words

I can’t fulfill my life

I can't go on to succeed

Because I'm a visitor in my own body

And somebody else has the key

The Poet Doctor July 1st, 2018 08:19
Quite explosive with truth. Good write
- a potatoJuly 1st, 2018 12:55
  Thanks!
onepauly July 1st, 2018 18:42
every time something good happens
to me there's always a shadow on my back.

(creedence clearwater survival)
- onepaulyJuly 1st, 2018 18:50
  sorry, I didn't mean that the way it came out.
  
  I did enjoy it.
- a potatoJuly 8th, 2018 06:50
  Its okay! Thanks anyway!
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) July 9th, 2018 02:37
good poem! powerful ending .. '' someone else has the key '' this speaks of a lack of control

'' I'm a visitor in my own body

And somebody else has the key''

sounds like there is a distance, a sense of distance from yourself
- a potatoJuly 9th, 2018 12:32
  Thank you! I always enjoy reading your thoughtful comments!

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Visitor in my own body