Comments received on poems by Stephen.Sapaugh
The threads unwinding.
Gary Edward Geraci said:
\"Bees live and feed on bitter food when making their honey; in the same way, we can never practice gentleness and patience or produce honey from such excellent virtues more surely than when eating the bread of bitterness and living in the midst of affliction.\" St. Francis de Sales
July 20th, 2017 06:53
Gary Edward Geraci said:
\"Bees live and feed on bitter food when making their honey; in the same way, we can never practice gentleness and patience or produce honey from such excellent virtues more surely than when eating the bread of bitterness and living in the midst of affliction.\" St. Francis de Sales
July 20th, 2017 06:53
The threads unwinding.
lastbadbrad6 said:
very realastic write, even thou it hurts, you have the strength with god to make it
July 20th, 2017 02:18
lastbadbrad6 said:
very realastic write, even thou it hurts, you have the strength with god to make it
July 20th, 2017 02:18
The threads unwinding.
Heather T said:
Flesh cannot be torn from flesh without a great deal of pain. I am so sorry you are going through this dark time. The picture paired with your words is a sorrowful tale of despair. The heart is fickle and can lead us in all kinds of directions. I\'m really not adept at the type of critique that you prefer, but I can tell you how perfectly the raw emotion has poured through your spill, Stephen.
July 19th, 2017 15:58
Heather T said:
Flesh cannot be torn from flesh without a great deal of pain. I am so sorry you are going through this dark time. The picture paired with your words is a sorrowful tale of despair. The heart is fickle and can lead us in all kinds of directions. I\'m really not adept at the type of critique that you prefer, but I can tell you how perfectly the raw emotion has poured through your spill, Stephen.
July 19th, 2017 15:58
The Fear Within.
Gary Edward Geraci said:
I was just slightly distracted by your neologism \"atearing\" but to see how it otherwise fits in with your design of ending each stanza with an \"a\" word, I could get past it. I applaud the metaphysical allusion to temptation and sin that you strive to create; clearly poetry is a medium for instruction - even if the appeal is toward the subconscious. Nice rhyme and meter. Your casting of a \"monster\" seemed a bit puerile, unless of course your intended audience are children. If you asked me to grade it I\'d give you 7/10.
July 8th, 2017 12:13
Gary Edward Geraci said:
I was just slightly distracted by your neologism \"atearing\" but to see how it otherwise fits in with your design of ending each stanza with an \"a\" word, I could get past it. I applaud the metaphysical allusion to temptation and sin that you strive to create; clearly poetry is a medium for instruction - even if the appeal is toward the subconscious. Nice rhyme and meter. Your casting of a \"monster\" seemed a bit puerile, unless of course your intended audience are children. If you asked me to grade it I\'d give you 7/10.
July 8th, 2017 12:13
Twenty and six.
MaddieJ said:
I like that you were able to say alot in so few lines. SO true too!! I feel that the older I am getting the less I really know and can be sure about. I love how you used \"easy inquestioning\" like heather T
July 7th, 2017 23:57
MaddieJ said:
I like that you were able to say alot in so few lines. SO true too!! I feel that the older I am getting the less I really know and can be sure about. I love how you used \"easy inquestioning\" like heather T
July 7th, 2017 23:57
Twenty and six.
Heather T said:
My favorites are \"easy unquestioning\" and \"brag like an archer hitting his mark\".
July 7th, 2017 22:38
Heather T said:
My favorites are \"easy unquestioning\" and \"brag like an archer hitting his mark\".
July 7th, 2017 22:38
Twenty and six.
FredPeyer said:
The older I get the more I know that I don\'t know anything!
I do like this poem a lot. Thank you.
July 7th, 2017 20:14
FredPeyer said:
The older I get the more I know that I don\'t know anything!
I do like this poem a lot. Thank you.
July 7th, 2017 20:14
The Fear Within.
Xxxplicit said:
A Very strong and sturdy write, deeply captivating yet not too complex. Well done I\'d love to see more writings.
July 5th, 2017 21:10
Xxxplicit said:
A Very strong and sturdy write, deeply captivating yet not too complex. Well done I\'d love to see more writings.
July 5th, 2017 21:10
The Fear Within.
Nicholas Browning said:
There is a monster within us all, sir. Your use of capitalization and clever prefixes are wonderful.
July 5th, 2017 16:54
Nicholas Browning said:
There is a monster within us all, sir. Your use of capitalization and clever prefixes are wonderful.
July 5th, 2017 16:54
The Fear Within.
orchidee said:
Oh, I would not have used \'dog\'. I\'m not thinking particularly poetically here. I\'m just thinking of a dog as man\'s best friend, as they say. Unless it\'s some mad dog or something, that can\'t be tamed of course.
July 5th, 2017 13:20
orchidee said:
Oh, I would not have used \'dog\'. I\'m not thinking particularly poetically here. I\'m just thinking of a dog as man\'s best friend, as they say. Unless it\'s some mad dog or something, that can\'t be tamed of course.
July 5th, 2017 13:20
The Fear Within.
Kurt Philip Behm said:
Ah, the two faces of fear. Strong work with a great ending!
Kurt
July 5th, 2017 10:29
Kurt Philip Behm said:
Ah, the two faces of fear. Strong work with a great ending!
Kurt
July 5th, 2017 10:29
The Fear Within.
FredPeyer said:
A strong poem describing that feeling perfectly. Like it, especially the last stanza.
July 5th, 2017 10:25
FredPeyer said:
A strong poem describing that feeling perfectly. Like it, especially the last stanza.
July 5th, 2017 10:25
The Fear Within.
Renzi said:
Ahh i know it only to well.. Temptation. May you find your strength. Be your strength!!
July 5th, 2017 09:42
Renzi said:
Ahh i know it only to well.. Temptation. May you find your strength. Be your strength!!
July 5th, 2017 09:42
