Comments received on poems by Laurell
NO WAY
Laurell said:
Thank you to all that commented. I was compelled to share this poem because it was too much to keep secret. It is great to have an outlet.
July 6th, 2017 08:53
Laurell said:
Thank you to all that commented. I was compelled to share this poem because it was too much to keep secret. It is great to have an outlet.
July 6th, 2017 08:53
NO WAY
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME TO MPS LAURELL ~ Thank you for sharing your very first poem ! The STRUCTURE of you poem is very vibrant and dynamic with each line commencing with and emphasising the title ~ NO WAY ~ Awesome Structure we all got the Message ~ the AGONY of the ENDING of a VERY SPECIAL LOVE. This is a SAD LOVE SONNET and each of the 14 lines highlights an important facet of your love that you have lost ~ and the fact that there is NO WAY BACK and NO WAY you can retrieve or recover and aspect of your Love ~ NO WAY ! I it so so sad I was crying for you by the final line. It happens to Men and I am old enough (33) to have experienced both the ECSTASY & AGONY of LOVE. I have survived but the pain is eternal ! So I can empathise with you ! Thinking of you Praying for you ~ Your MPS Friend & Fellow Poet ~ BRIAN (UK) Please check my Poems ~ Thanks B
July 5th, 2017 15:34
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME TO MPS LAURELL ~ Thank you for sharing your very first poem ! The STRUCTURE of you poem is very vibrant and dynamic with each line commencing with and emphasising the title ~ NO WAY ~ Awesome Structure we all got the Message ~ the AGONY of the ENDING of a VERY SPECIAL LOVE. This is a SAD LOVE SONNET and each of the 14 lines highlights an important facet of your love that you have lost ~ and the fact that there is NO WAY BACK and NO WAY you can retrieve or recover and aspect of your Love ~ NO WAY ! I it so so sad I was crying for you by the final line. It happens to Men and I am old enough (33) to have experienced both the ECSTASY & AGONY of LOVE. I have survived but the pain is eternal ! So I can empathise with you ! Thinking of you Praying for you ~ Your MPS Friend & Fellow Poet ~ BRIAN (UK) Please check my Poems ~ Thanks B
July 5th, 2017 15:34
NO WAY
burning-embers said:
Great write. Reads like you are cleansing yourself of this betrayer. Conveys hurt and anger and STRENGTH.
July 5th, 2017 15:19
burning-embers said:
Great write. Reads like you are cleansing yourself of this betrayer. Conveys hurt and anger and STRENGTH.
July 5th, 2017 15:19
NO WAY
FredPeyer said:
Agree with Amanda, the changing capitalization is intriguing. Also like the way your repetition of \"no way\" re-inforces the statements that follow. Good writing, good poem! Thanks.
July 5th, 2017 13:28
FredPeyer said:
Agree with Amanda, the changing capitalization is intriguing. Also like the way your repetition of \"no way\" re-inforces the statements that follow. Good writing, good poem! Thanks.
July 5th, 2017 13:28
NO WAY
Stephen.Sapaugh said:
This poem is utter madness ebbing and flowing together. I know you are writing it to get through some of your emotions, and I am truly grateful that you are. I hope that you feel better after writing this, and it makes me very interested in your own works. Normally I would grade this poem, but as it seems to be really emotionally charged I\'ll just leave you with that I am happy you wrote it.
July 5th, 2017 13:01
Stephen.Sapaugh said:
This poem is utter madness ebbing and flowing together. I know you are writing it to get through some of your emotions, and I am truly grateful that you are. I hope that you feel better after writing this, and it makes me very interested in your own works. Normally I would grade this poem, but as it seems to be really emotionally charged I\'ll just leave you with that I am happy you wrote it.
July 5th, 2017 13:01
NO WAY
AmandaJade said:
I love how you changed the capitalization of \"no way\" throughout the poem, very creative. Nice work!
July 5th, 2017 12:59
AmandaJade said:
I love how you changed the capitalization of \"no way\" throughout the poem, very creative. Nice work!
July 5th, 2017 12:59
