Comments received on poems by bagel
Escape
burning-embers said:
I feel your angst. I\'m going to ask you to think about something, an old true phrase you probably heard before, that will improve your poetry. \"Less is more\". Take a look at some of the very short single verses published on here - they\'re so thought provoking and invite you the reader to paint your own picture. They use just enough carefully chosen words to get the job done. Constructive food for thought i hope.
July 13th, 2017 00:34
burning-embers said:
I feel your angst. I\'m going to ask you to think about something, an old true phrase you probably heard before, that will improve your poetry. \"Less is more\". Take a look at some of the very short single verses published on here - they\'re so thought provoking and invite you the reader to paint your own picture. They use just enough carefully chosen words to get the job done. Constructive food for thought i hope.
July 13th, 2017 00:34
Wife
burning-embers said:
As a teenager i used to hate that people said girls are way more grown up than same age boys. I think your piece says this. Yes, find a guy who is the other half of your orange.
July 12th, 2017 22:38
burning-embers said:
As a teenager i used to hate that people said girls are way more grown up than same age boys. I think your piece says this. Yes, find a guy who is the other half of your orange.
July 12th, 2017 22:38
Paper Cuts
burning-embers said:
I love this. i dunno why but i just do. I think youve reached into my jumbled memories and experiences on the periphery of whatever i was doing whenever i was doing it and poured them out here. It\'s magical. +favs
July 11th, 2017 15:03
burning-embers said:
I love this. i dunno why but i just do. I think youve reached into my jumbled memories and experiences on the periphery of whatever i was doing whenever i was doing it and poured them out here. It\'s magical. +favs
July 11th, 2017 15:03
Glass Marbles
Gary Edward Geraci said:
My son suffers in a similar way Bagel; he sticks to his medication and he does fine - holding down two jobs, taking college classes, lots of friends, believes in God.... So I have faith that others can do it too. Check out NAMI often; those guys are our friends. Rather than a baby alien driving your body (I know it feels that way) in reality, that\'s a soul created by God simply working the best she can with a body harmed \"My soul bespeaks a body harmed\" I write in one of my own poems. You\'re safe here to express yourself just as you did today. Cheers and many more!
July 10th, 2017 22:33
Gary Edward Geraci said:
My son suffers in a similar way Bagel; he sticks to his medication and he does fine - holding down two jobs, taking college classes, lots of friends, believes in God.... So I have faith that others can do it too. Check out NAMI often; those guys are our friends. Rather than a baby alien driving your body (I know it feels that way) in reality, that\'s a soul created by God simply working the best she can with a body harmed \"My soul bespeaks a body harmed\" I write in one of my own poems. You\'re safe here to express yourself just as you did today. Cheers and many more!
July 10th, 2017 22:33
Glass Marbles
bagel said:
Thank you and I\'m glad you like it! About being stoned, I am too anxious to think properly otherwise. If I am not high I am unable to express myself in an eloquent manner. I guess when I say that I write stoned I mean that as a way to differentiate my mental health and communication skills from people who are not mentally ill. That people who do not suffer from mental illness may be able to think fine and in a tangible order without the use of drugs or medications or any sort of aide.
July 10th, 2017 21:29
bagel said:
Thank you and I\'m glad you like it! About being stoned, I am too anxious to think properly otherwise. If I am not high I am unable to express myself in an eloquent manner. I guess when I say that I write stoned I mean that as a way to differentiate my mental health and communication skills from people who are not mentally ill. That people who do not suffer from mental illness may be able to think fine and in a tangible order without the use of drugs or medications or any sort of aide.
July 10th, 2017 21:29
