Comments received on poems by gstoy
Autumn leaves
rrodriguez said:
Brian brought some excellent pointers. Keep at it and your poetry will mature. Thsnk you for sharing.
November 3rd, 2017 21:02
rrodriguez said:
Brian brought some excellent pointers. Keep at it and your poetry will mature. Thsnk you for sharing.
November 3rd, 2017 21:02
Autumn leaves
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME FRIEND ~ Thanks for your first poem ! Well structured \"free verse\" and well spaced to facilitate reading ! A poem should be spaced to look like a POEM !
Modern Poetry does not have to rhyme but it does need rhythm ~ flow. You need to pay a bit more attention to meter (syllable counts etc) to improve the flow ~ OK.
I loved the content and the analogy between Life & love & Growing up with leaf cycle on a tree ~ and the falling leaves indicating the end of a relationship.
It happens like that ! MORE PLEASE ~ Yours Brian (UK)
Please check my poems ~ Thanks B.
November 3rd, 2017 19:20
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME FRIEND ~ Thanks for your first poem ! Well structured \"free verse\" and well spaced to facilitate reading ! A poem should be spaced to look like a POEM !
Modern Poetry does not have to rhyme but it does need rhythm ~ flow. You need to pay a bit more attention to meter (syllable counts etc) to improve the flow ~ OK.
I loved the content and the analogy between Life & love & Growing up with leaf cycle on a tree ~ and the falling leaves indicating the end of a relationship.
It happens like that ! MORE PLEASE ~ Yours Brian (UK)
Please check my poems ~ Thanks B.
November 3rd, 2017 19:20
