Comments received on poems by User
It is not your fault
Doggerel Dave said:
Jilly, you are a hard one to fathom. Your three poems registered here, which cover a period of three to four years, appear about roses in perfect plastic and real roses in death throes?; parental neglect? And domestic violence resulting from the socialisation which lead the subject into that situation.
They are neat, structured, but enigmatic. Who are you? (context please).
September 16th, 2021 05:34
Doggerel Dave said:
Jilly, you are a hard one to fathom. Your three poems registered here, which cover a period of three to four years, appear about roses in perfect plastic and real roses in death throes?; parental neglect? And domestic violence resulting from the socialisation which lead the subject into that situation.
They are neat, structured, but enigmatic. Who are you? (context please).
September 16th, 2021 05:34
It is not your fault
L. B. Mek said:
love is important, essential maybe
but, it isn\'t All
that there is, we can still exist and thrive without it
if fate has so decreed, for us..
but the key, is we don\'t align
Love: with the Who, we loved..
that\'s like blaming the fork, for the food, that\'s poisoned us?
it doesn\'t work that way, instead
we need to insure that fork is, cleansed of all that past experience, and ready to be utilised
if we\'re ever gifted another opportunity
at experiencing that nourishing - touch, of true love..
(an impassioned write, thanks for sharing)
September 16th, 2021 05:22
L. B. Mek said:
love is important, essential maybe
but, it isn\'t All
that there is, we can still exist and thrive without it
if fate has so decreed, for us..
but the key, is we don\'t align
Love: with the Who, we loved..
that\'s like blaming the fork, for the food, that\'s poisoned us?
it doesn\'t work that way, instead
we need to insure that fork is, cleansed of all that past experience, and ready to be utilised
if we\'re ever gifted another opportunity
at experiencing that nourishing - touch, of true love..
(an impassioned write, thanks for sharing)
September 16th, 2021 05:22
It is not your fault
User said:
I know there are a few typos, I wasn’t very careful. I just wanted to get it out of me
September 16th, 2021 02:05
User said:
I know there are a few typos, I wasn’t very careful. I just wanted to get it out of me
September 16th, 2021 02:05
Red Rose
Resa71 said:
Your poem is lovely!
You should definitely write more:)
January 24th, 2018 02:04
Resa71 said:
Your poem is lovely!
You should definitely write more:)
January 24th, 2018 02:04
Red Rose
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME JILLYBEAN (love you pen name) Thanks for your first poem ~ perfection ! STRUCTURE: Seven balanced Quatrains with a consistent Rhyme Pattern (xaxa xbxb etc) ~ I am a Performance Poet and this recites perfectly a hallmark of a very good poem ! SUBJECT: In verses 1 & 2 you introduce the two species of ROSE ~ Synthetic (Plastic) & Natural ! The Plastic ones of course do not age and (provided you dust them) always stay as beautiful as when they were when they were manufactured. Real ROSES of course (like every living thing) change and decay and eventually die ~ even Elephants ! In verses 3 ~ 4 ~ 5 you describe the change and decay in the \"Living Roses\" and you are powerless to stop it ~ \"Death follows certain rules! I the final verses you come back to the Plastic Roses and lament their \"Eternal Life\" just as you lamented the \"Death\" of the natural ones ! This Poem is better than you know and is capable of interpretation and application at so many levels in Life & Love ! We live in an increasingly \"Plastic World\" and the age of the Humanoid House Robot is upon us and I know that some Stupid Men will prefer them to natural Ladies because they will never have a Headache and never Age. Some Ladies are already married to ROBOTIC MEN and none of the Ladies I know would want to marry a Mechanical One ! Thanks for sharing an amazing Poem ~ more please ~ Yours BRIAN (UK) The way MPS works is you comment on others Poems and they will comment on yours ~ You can also build up a Circle of MPS Friends ~ OK ~ B.
December 16th, 2017 15:15
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME JILLYBEAN (love you pen name) Thanks for your first poem ~ perfection ! STRUCTURE: Seven balanced Quatrains with a consistent Rhyme Pattern (xaxa xbxb etc) ~ I am a Performance Poet and this recites perfectly a hallmark of a very good poem ! SUBJECT: In verses 1 & 2 you introduce the two species of ROSE ~ Synthetic (Plastic) & Natural ! The Plastic ones of course do not age and (provided you dust them) always stay as beautiful as when they were when they were manufactured. Real ROSES of course (like every living thing) change and decay and eventually die ~ even Elephants ! In verses 3 ~ 4 ~ 5 you describe the change and decay in the \"Living Roses\" and you are powerless to stop it ~ \"Death follows certain rules! I the final verses you come back to the Plastic Roses and lament their \"Eternal Life\" just as you lamented the \"Death\" of the natural ones ! This Poem is better than you know and is capable of interpretation and application at so many levels in Life & Love ! We live in an increasingly \"Plastic World\" and the age of the Humanoid House Robot is upon us and I know that some Stupid Men will prefer them to natural Ladies because they will never have a Headache and never Age. Some Ladies are already married to ROBOTIC MEN and none of the Ladies I know would want to marry a Mechanical One ! Thanks for sharing an amazing Poem ~ more please ~ Yours BRIAN (UK) The way MPS works is you comment on others Poems and they will comment on yours ~ You can also build up a Circle of MPS Friends ~ OK ~ B.
December 16th, 2017 15:15
