Comments received on poems by artsysunflower
Spring
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME SUNFLOWER ~ Thanks for your First Poem ! It is a real poem ~ it has Structure & Substance ! Love the shape and terseness of the lines ! Spring comes in with pace (the UK is still under 15 inches of SNOW !) but tomorrow will reveal ~ Spring cleaning ~ flowers ~ bunnies ~ chicks ~ lambs ~ buds ~ blossom ~ love ~ bursting out ~ all over ! Your excellent \"free verse\" poem mentions these things ~ Spring is dynamic. The SEASONS inspire Poets and in this ODE you have captured the essence & dynamism of SPRING ! Well done more please ! Yours BRIAN (UK) Please check my Poems ~ Thanks B.
March 3rd, 2018 05:09
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME SUNFLOWER ~ Thanks for your First Poem ! It is a real poem ~ it has Structure & Substance ! Love the shape and terseness of the lines ! Spring comes in with pace (the UK is still under 15 inches of SNOW !) but tomorrow will reveal ~ Spring cleaning ~ flowers ~ bunnies ~ chicks ~ lambs ~ buds ~ blossom ~ love ~ bursting out ~ all over ! Your excellent \"free verse\" poem mentions these things ~ Spring is dynamic. The SEASONS inspire Poets and in this ODE you have captured the essence & dynamism of SPRING ! Well done more please ! Yours BRIAN (UK) Please check my Poems ~ Thanks B.
March 3rd, 2018 05:09
Spring
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
hello i like this , although perhaps more could be added to this poem, maybe a simile , such as \'\' kids play like they have no tomorrow\'\' or \'\' kids play like ...\'\' maybe you could add in more similes or bring in more metaphors, maybe expanding the poem a little bit more ..give it more feeling maybe.
March 3rd, 2018 04:09
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
hello i like this , although perhaps more could be added to this poem, maybe a simile , such as \'\' kids play like they have no tomorrow\'\' or \'\' kids play like ...\'\' maybe you could add in more similes or bring in more metaphors, maybe expanding the poem a little bit more ..give it more feeling maybe.
March 3rd, 2018 04:09
