Comments received on poems by Ezekiel Ian Hitt
Perfect Women
RDS said:
Hi Ezekiel, a nice potent rhythm of love budding, hope to read more in the future.
My guess is that most of the friendly souls here can read beyond a typo here and there but to really honour your effort read it back looking for where the meaning escapes on a misplaced word. Someone might be put off from reading beyond an error...is it error who can tell...but I feel
\"... blackness crept unto my enter/entire being and marked me empty...\"
needs tweaking but lucky it was right on the last line! Feel free to ignore my ignorance if you were looking to say something different.
I read, hopefully as you wrote it, at a nice unhurried tempo that really matched the tone of thought. Thanks
J
November 30th, 2020 10:54
RDS said:
Hi Ezekiel, a nice potent rhythm of love budding, hope to read more in the future.
My guess is that most of the friendly souls here can read beyond a typo here and there but to really honour your effort read it back looking for where the meaning escapes on a misplaced word. Someone might be put off from reading beyond an error...is it error who can tell...but I feel
\"... blackness crept unto my enter/entire being and marked me empty...\"
needs tweaking but lucky it was right on the last line! Feel free to ignore my ignorance if you were looking to say something different.
I read, hopefully as you wrote it, at a nice unhurried tempo that really matched the tone of thought. Thanks
J
November 30th, 2020 10:54
Perfect Women
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
BRIAN HERE ~ GOOD MORNING EZEKIEL ~ Welcome to MPS ! It is a great site and operates by READING & COMMENTING on each others POEMS ~ OK ! Please check our SITE ~ Thanks.
Thanks for your first POEM. A sincere Love Poem ~ nicely presented & nicely worded ! I can empathise with you ! That just how I feel about ANGELA ! We have been married 8 months and hope to start our FAMILY as soon as this PANDEMIC has passed ~ AMEN !
Blessings & Peace to You & Yours
Love ANGELA & BRIAN 💛💛💛
November 30th, 2020 00:55
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
BRIAN HERE ~ GOOD MORNING EZEKIEL ~ Welcome to MPS ! It is a great site and operates by READING & COMMENTING on each others POEMS ~ OK ! Please check our SITE ~ Thanks.
Thanks for your first POEM. A sincere Love Poem ~ nicely presented & nicely worded ! I can empathise with you ! That just how I feel about ANGELA ! We have been married 8 months and hope to start our FAMILY as soon as this PANDEMIC has passed ~ AMEN !
Blessings & Peace to You & Yours
Love ANGELA & BRIAN 💛💛💛
November 30th, 2020 00:55
