Comments received on poems by Mason Vollman
Mom and Dad
ChadVader said:
You have a lovely family. I\'m a little jealous to be honest. I wonder if my life would have been different if I had a Mom that actually cared. I never knew my father. And by the time I figured out who he was, he had already passed on.
My Mom had 3 loves in life. My younger half sister, the bottle and drugs as in whatever she could get her hands on. I was never good enough. So I ran the streets or stayed with my grandparents to avoid the constant belittling, yelling,or hitting. I refused to hit back, but that only made her hit harder. Many days I went to school with a black eye or a broken nose or a dislocated jaw. Not once did I tell anyone how it happened. It was always a dirt bike accident or I fell off the trampoline.
We started to get along only shortly before she passed on in 2015. So I count that as a plus even if it was short lived
April 7th, 2024 11:24
ChadVader said:
You have a lovely family. I\'m a little jealous to be honest. I wonder if my life would have been different if I had a Mom that actually cared. I never knew my father. And by the time I figured out who he was, he had already passed on.
My Mom had 3 loves in life. My younger half sister, the bottle and drugs as in whatever she could get her hands on. I was never good enough. So I ran the streets or stayed with my grandparents to avoid the constant belittling, yelling,or hitting. I refused to hit back, but that only made her hit harder. Many days I went to school with a black eye or a broken nose or a dislocated jaw. Not once did I tell anyone how it happened. It was always a dirt bike accident or I fell off the trampoline.
We started to get along only shortly before she passed on in 2015. So I count that as a plus even if it was short lived
April 7th, 2024 11:24
Love
ChadVader said:
I give you credit, your pen game is way better than mine. You write from a wonderful place in the light. I write from the darkness of pain and heartache. Wonderfully written I can\'t help but smile when I read it.
April 7th, 2024 11:04
ChadVader said:
I give you credit, your pen game is way better than mine. You write from a wonderful place in the light. I write from the darkness of pain and heartache. Wonderfully written I can\'t help but smile when I read it.
April 7th, 2024 11:04
I Have Such Hopes For You...
ChadVader said:
Nice piece. It reminds me of a graduation speech that was set to music in the 90\'s Baz Luhrmann released the song “Everybody\'s Free To Wear Sunscreen\". I\'ll look for a YouTube link.
https://youtu.be/sTJ7AzBIJoI?si=hPWwnt7sdKJzYXdH
Check it out. It\'s worth it.
April 7th, 2024 11:00
ChadVader said:
Nice piece. It reminds me of a graduation speech that was set to music in the 90\'s Baz Luhrmann released the song “Everybody\'s Free To Wear Sunscreen\". I\'ll look for a YouTube link.
https://youtu.be/sTJ7AzBIJoI?si=hPWwnt7sdKJzYXdH
Check it out. It\'s worth it.
April 7th, 2024 11:00
Love\'s One Of A Kind.
ChadVader said:
I like your description of love. It has to be the most powerful thing in life really. When all is said and done. It\'s the mark you leave in the hearts of those you left behind.
I can only hope that I\'ve left warm feelings and great memories in everyone that has cared about me in life.
April 7th, 2024 10:51
ChadVader said:
I like your description of love. It has to be the most powerful thing in life really. When all is said and done. It\'s the mark you leave in the hearts of those you left behind.
I can only hope that I\'ve left warm feelings and great memories in everyone that has cared about me in life.
April 7th, 2024 10:51
Listen to What Im Not Saying.
ChadVader said:
Everyone wears a mask. Even the most confident person has something they fear or envy or wish that they were. It\'s easy to be someone else. it\'s hard to face the world as yourself. I haven\'t met a single person that actually does. Great work.
April 7th, 2024 10:08
ChadVader said:
Everyone wears a mask. Even the most confident person has something they fear or envy or wish that they were. It\'s easy to be someone else. it\'s hard to face the world as yourself. I haven\'t met a single person that actually does. Great work.
April 7th, 2024 10:08
If Only I Knew
ChadVader said:
I appreciate how your writing style can change and conform to so many different styles. I\'m picking up Edgar Allen Poe... Not for the content, but in the flow. Your message is a strong one. And it truly is beautiful. Great job... And yes I\'m probably going to read and comment on all. You\'ve gained a fan.
April 7th, 2024 10:02
ChadVader said:
I appreciate how your writing style can change and conform to so many different styles. I\'m picking up Edgar Allen Poe... Not for the content, but in the flow. Your message is a strong one. And it truly is beautiful. Great job... And yes I\'m probably going to read and comment on all. You\'ve gained a fan.
April 7th, 2024 10:02
Dear Little One
ChadVader said:
So I read this as The Lord being the one talking to the Little One. It could be a parent too but it works well either way. I love the Tupac inspiration.
April 7th, 2024 09:20
ChadVader said:
So I read this as The Lord being the one talking to the Little One. It could be a parent too but it works well either way. I love the Tupac inspiration.
April 7th, 2024 09:20
Hide
ChadVader said:
Everyone feels this from time to time. It\'s amazing how eloquently you were able to pack so much into something that on the surface looks simple and in reality it\'s anything but. Two thumbs way up for this one.
April 7th, 2024 09:16
ChadVader said:
Everyone feels this from time to time. It\'s amazing how eloquently you were able to pack so much into something that on the surface looks simple and in reality it\'s anything but. Two thumbs way up for this one.
April 7th, 2024 09:16
Hide
sorenbarrett said:
I have felt that way before and they say that what makes a poem, relevant is whether the reader can identify with it. If so this one makes it. Well done
April 6th, 2024 14:13
sorenbarrett said:
I have felt that way before and they say that what makes a poem, relevant is whether the reader can identify with it. If so this one makes it. Well done
April 6th, 2024 14:13
Hide
orchidee said:
But you already are hiding, under that box on ya head! lol. Can\'t see ya there. heehee.
April 6th, 2024 12:48
orchidee said:
But you already are hiding, under that box on ya head! lol. Can\'t see ya there. heehee.
April 6th, 2024 12:48
Hide
Lil said:
Ooooooooooooooo I love this. It really shows how us people think these days.
April 6th, 2024 12:41
Lil said:
Ooooooooooooooo I love this. It really shows how us people think these days.
April 6th, 2024 12:41
Love
Your_dreams said:
How can the words be just as beautiful as the meaning behind them? Wonderfully composed 👏
April 5th, 2024 20:33
Your_dreams said:
How can the words be just as beautiful as the meaning behind them? Wonderfully composed 👏
April 5th, 2024 20:33
Dear Little One
sorenbarrett said:
A great message of reassurance and guidance. Well said.
April 5th, 2024 19:53
sorenbarrett said:
A great message of reassurance and guidance. Well said.
April 5th, 2024 19:53
If Only I Knew
Mason Vollman said:
Ha, silly Orchidee. God guides me. Don\'t need to see😀
April 4th, 2024 17:19
Mason Vollman said:
Ha, silly Orchidee. God guides me. Don\'t need to see😀
April 4th, 2024 17:19
If Only I Knew
orchidee said:
Could ya take that bag off ya head, then ya could SEE where ya are going! heehee.
April 4th, 2024 01:57
orchidee said:
Could ya take that bag off ya head, then ya could SEE where ya are going! heehee.
April 4th, 2024 01:57
If Only I Knew
A.D. Small said:
I really love your use of imagery here and I also love the way this poem just flowed out of you!!!! Great job!
April 3rd, 2024 03:00
A.D. Small said:
I really love your use of imagery here and I also love the way this poem just flowed out of you!!!! Great job!
April 3rd, 2024 03:00
Listen to What Im Not Saying.
orchidee said:
Good write M. Can\'t see ya with that bag over ya head! lol.
March 9th, 2024 02:52
orchidee said:
Good write M. Can\'t see ya with that bag over ya head! lol.
March 9th, 2024 02:52
Love
Yassin Tamam said:
I love how well it reads and how smooth it is to touch, well done ❤️❤️
November 2nd, 2023 18:28
Yassin Tamam said:
I love how well it reads and how smooth it is to touch, well done ❤️❤️
November 2nd, 2023 18:28
Mom and Dad
Mason Vollman said:
In a world where rules are set in stone,
Where justice and fairness are too often overthrown,
A system that\'s supposed to protect and guide,
Often leaves the vulnerable feeling cast aside.
The scales of justice, they teeter and sway,
As power and privilege often have their way,
The wealthy and connected, they wield their might,
While the marginalized struggle in the darkest night.
Inequality abounds, a cruel and bitter truth,
Leaving many to fight for their dreams from their youth,
A cycle of oppression, so hard to break,
Leaving too many lives at stake.
But in the shadows, a glimmer of hope,
A call for change, a way to cope,
Together we can strive for a world that\'s just,
Where the system\'s flaws are left in the dust.
Let\'s tear down the walls that divide us apart,
And mend the broken pieces of every heart,
For in unity and love, we\'ll find our way,
To reshape the system, to a brighter day.
In this messed up world, there\'s strength in our fight,
To make the system better, more just, more right,
With courage and determination, we can rise above,
And create a system founded on fairness and love.
October 31st, 2023 19:48
Mason Vollman said:
In a world where rules are set in stone,
Where justice and fairness are too often overthrown,
A system that\'s supposed to protect and guide,
Often leaves the vulnerable feeling cast aside.
The scales of justice, they teeter and sway,
As power and privilege often have their way,
The wealthy and connected, they wield their might,
While the marginalized struggle in the darkest night.
Inequality abounds, a cruel and bitter truth,
Leaving many to fight for their dreams from their youth,
A cycle of oppression, so hard to break,
Leaving too many lives at stake.
But in the shadows, a glimmer of hope,
A call for change, a way to cope,
Together we can strive for a world that\'s just,
Where the system\'s flaws are left in the dust.
Let\'s tear down the walls that divide us apart,
And mend the broken pieces of every heart,
For in unity and love, we\'ll find our way,
To reshape the system, to a brighter day.
In this messed up world, there\'s strength in our fight,
To make the system better, more just, more right,
With courage and determination, we can rise above,
And create a system founded on fairness and love.
October 31st, 2023 19:48
ᒪIᐯE ᗩᔕ I ᔕᕼOᑌᒪᗪ
sorenbarrett said:
A prayer of hope and safty and security in an unpredictable world. I too wish for this
July 5th, 2023 08:51
sorenbarrett said:
A prayer of hope and safty and security in an unpredictable world. I too wish for this
July 5th, 2023 08:51
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