Comments received on poems by Reflections Corporate Training Hub
Rendezvousing River
Soman Ragavan said:
My comments on the poem \"Rendezvousing River” by Reflections Corporate Training Hub
From your writings, you sure have the skills to write poetry. Your rhyming is very good and you do have a large vocabulary. You know how to express in poetry scenes of nature that come your way.
However, as a friend and fellow-poet, may I kindly point out that in the last two stanzas, there is a slight lapse in the rhyming :
“air” does not rhyme well with “rare”
“true” does not rhyme well with “anew”
Please fefer to the following :
“RHYME. When words have the same vowel sound and end with the same consonant sound, they are said to RHYME. Eg : snow, low; cease, please. Rhyme makes the verse more musical, by giving it pleasing sounds. It also preserves the verse form by marking the ends of lines. (…)”
WREN & MARTIN : \"HIGH SCHOOL ENGLISH GRAMMAR AND COMPOSITION.\" (REVISED BY PRASADA RAO). NEW DELHI : S. CHAND & CO., 1994. (REPRINTED 1994). (Pages : 399 - 415).
Full acknowledgements are made to the authors, publishers and rights-holders.
On the whole the poem is excellent. Rhyming is NOT everything. It is the poem itself that counts. Still, one must be aware of rhyming rules.
Best wishes, kind friend.
Today I have posted my poem “Buy one, get one free…” on this site.
Note that I myself do NOT always write excellent rhymes in my poetry.
Soman Ragavan. 30 May, 2023. //
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May 30th, 2023 00:55
Soman Ragavan said:
My comments on the poem \"Rendezvousing River” by Reflections Corporate Training Hub
From your writings, you sure have the skills to write poetry. Your rhyming is very good and you do have a large vocabulary. You know how to express in poetry scenes of nature that come your way.
However, as a friend and fellow-poet, may I kindly point out that in the last two stanzas, there is a slight lapse in the rhyming :
“air” does not rhyme well with “rare”
“true” does not rhyme well with “anew”
Please fefer to the following :
“RHYME. When words have the same vowel sound and end with the same consonant sound, they are said to RHYME. Eg : snow, low; cease, please. Rhyme makes the verse more musical, by giving it pleasing sounds. It also preserves the verse form by marking the ends of lines. (…)”
WREN & MARTIN : \"HIGH SCHOOL ENGLISH GRAMMAR AND COMPOSITION.\" (REVISED BY PRASADA RAO). NEW DELHI : S. CHAND & CO., 1994. (REPRINTED 1994). (Pages : 399 - 415).
Full acknowledgements are made to the authors, publishers and rights-holders.
On the whole the poem is excellent. Rhyming is NOT everything. It is the poem itself that counts. Still, one must be aware of rhyming rules.
Best wishes, kind friend.
Today I have posted my poem “Buy one, get one free…” on this site.
Note that I myself do NOT always write excellent rhymes in my poetry.
Soman Ragavan. 30 May, 2023. //
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May 30th, 2023 00:55
Heaven in Himachal
Soman Ragavan said:
List of my poems on India on allpoetry.com :
--Kishore Kumar (1) to (10) [singer]
--India (1) to (6)
--Kumar Sanu (1) [singer]
--Alka Yagnik (1) [singer]
--Lots of handkerchiefs (Plague at Surat, Gujarat, 1994)
-- L’Inde immortelle
--Immortal India (English translation of “L’Inde immortelle”)
--Maestro Sagnik Sen [singer, poet, painter, pianist]
--On Indian Music (New Delhi)
--To Metro (Indian) workers (in Mauritius)
--Anjalay (partly on India)
--Slavery revisited (partly on India)
--The panting ox (New Delhi)
--The waiting oxen (New Delhi)
--A marvel in marble (On the Taj Mahal)
--The maestro of Jaipur (India)
--Back to my roots (I. Gandhi International Airport and New Delhi)
--Drowning the gift (Haryana, India)
Soman Ragavan. 21 May, 2023.
May 21st, 2023 06:37
Soman Ragavan said:
List of my poems on India on allpoetry.com :
--Kishore Kumar (1) to (10) [singer]
--India (1) to (6)
--Kumar Sanu (1) [singer]
--Alka Yagnik (1) [singer]
--Lots of handkerchiefs (Plague at Surat, Gujarat, 1994)
-- L’Inde immortelle
--Immortal India (English translation of “L’Inde immortelle”)
--Maestro Sagnik Sen [singer, poet, painter, pianist]
--On Indian Music (New Delhi)
--To Metro (Indian) workers (in Mauritius)
--Anjalay (partly on India)
--Slavery revisited (partly on India)
--The panting ox (New Delhi)
--The waiting oxen (New Delhi)
--A marvel in marble (On the Taj Mahal)
--The maestro of Jaipur (India)
--Back to my roots (I. Gandhi International Airport and New Delhi)
--Drowning the gift (Haryana, India)
Soman Ragavan. 21 May, 2023.
May 21st, 2023 06:37
Heaven in Himachal
Soman Ragavan said:
21 May, 2023
Between India and the Indian, it is a never-ending love story. Even death cannot end it. Indian immigration to Mauritius started in 1835. We still have Indian culture, traditions, religion, music etc. Please see my poems on India at the site allpoetry.com. Little by little I will post the poems here. Soman Ragavan. https://allpoetry.com/Soman_Ragavan
May 21st, 2023 06:06
Soman Ragavan said:
21 May, 2023
Between India and the Indian, it is a never-ending love story. Even death cannot end it. Indian immigration to Mauritius started in 1835. We still have Indian culture, traditions, religion, music etc. Please see my poems on India at the site allpoetry.com. Little by little I will post the poems here. Soman Ragavan. https://allpoetry.com/Soman_Ragavan
May 21st, 2023 06:06
Heaven in Himachal
Eugene S. said:
I have always wanted to visit that region. You portray it beautifully in your poem.
May 21st, 2023 05:40
Eugene S. said:
I have always wanted to visit that region. You portray it beautifully in your poem.
May 21st, 2023 05:40
Adventure at the Airport
Parisab said:
You immerse the reader into the adventure-good inspiration for those who fear flying and those who don’t travel-
May 16th, 2023 13:06
Parisab said:
You immerse the reader into the adventure-good inspiration for those who fear flying and those who don’t travel-
May 16th, 2023 13:06
