Comments received on poems by Poetic Licence
Peace or Revenge.
Cheeky Missy said:
Revenge was the only logical course of action left. Unless the enemies deluded the children, they\'d return to punish them, which why history seems to run as it does, seems to me. It\'s a curious mindset these days which recoils and bewails every single death while demanding the right to kill whomever at will.
Excellently rendered with superb imagery and a haunting poignancy. Thank you very much for sharing.
August 12th, 2025 11:50
Cheeky Missy said:
Revenge was the only logical course of action left. Unless the enemies deluded the children, they\'d return to punish them, which why history seems to run as it does, seems to me. It\'s a curious mindset these days which recoils and bewails every single death while demanding the right to kill whomever at will.
Excellently rendered with superb imagery and a haunting poignancy. Thank you very much for sharing.
August 12th, 2025 11:50
Peace or Revenge.
rebellion_in_sanity said:
This keeps the door of starvation slightly closed for a while as they eat among the dead.- devastating lines. I shall not forget them in a hurry.
Please do forgive me- this seems to be one of the finest. Thanks for sharing 🙏
August 12th, 2025 10:16
rebellion_in_sanity said:
This keeps the door of starvation slightly closed for a while as they eat among the dead.- devastating lines. I shall not forget them in a hurry.
Please do forgive me- this seems to be one of the finest. Thanks for sharing 🙏
August 12th, 2025 10:16
Peace or Revenge.
Tristan Robert Lange said:
💯 Tobani…this holds nothing back. You’ve given us the sights, sounds, and cost of war in a way that lingers long after the read. That final question...peace or revenge...lands heavy because you’ve shown exactly what feeds both. Powerful work, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛ Have a fabulous day!
August 12th, 2025 09:52
Tristan Robert Lange said:
💯 Tobani…this holds nothing back. You’ve given us the sights, sounds, and cost of war in a way that lingers long after the read. That final question...peace or revenge...lands heavy because you’ve shown exactly what feeds both. Powerful work, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛ Have a fabulous day!
August 12th, 2025 09:52
Peace or Revenge.
Tony Grannell said:
How the bile simmers when seething with hate, boiling over in to the horrors of revenge. A very powerful poem, Tobani. Very well done.
Fond regards,
Tony.
August 12th, 2025 06:42
Tony Grannell said:
How the bile simmers when seething with hate, boiling over in to the horrors of revenge. A very powerful poem, Tobani. Very well done.
Fond regards,
Tony.
August 12th, 2025 06:42
Peace or Revenge.
sorenbarrett said:
Revenge gasoline for the fire of hatred. A heart felt write that pulls at the heart watching people sliding down the cliff of ideological feuds where bushes of reprisal are grasped at out of desperation. A curse of mankind whose memory for bad outlasts his memory for kindness and good. Well written
August 12th, 2025 04:09
sorenbarrett said:
Revenge gasoline for the fire of hatred. A heart felt write that pulls at the heart watching people sliding down the cliff of ideological feuds where bushes of reprisal are grasped at out of desperation. A curse of mankind whose memory for bad outlasts his memory for kindness and good. Well written
August 12th, 2025 04:09
GRATIAS (GAME OVER)
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Exactly, Tobani! You’ve boiled it down to that blunt finality that hits harder because of its simplicity. The visual drop to “Game Over” seals it perfectly. Loved this one, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 11th, 2025 19:29
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Exactly, Tobani! You’ve boiled it down to that blunt finality that hits harder because of its simplicity. The visual drop to “Game Over” seals it perfectly. Loved this one, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 11th, 2025 19:29
GRATIAS (GAME OVER)
Cheeky Missy said:
I guess the most fascinating angle on this gorgeous beauty is how many times I\'ve spoken it aloud to acknowledge that\'s what I/we are irresistibly staring down. After that, pardon et moi, I don\'t know any Latin, excepting \"pig Latin: ig pay atin lay.\" Awesomely rendered with a disturbingly haunting and deadly poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
August 11th, 2025 11:12
Cheeky Missy said:
I guess the most fascinating angle on this gorgeous beauty is how many times I\'ve spoken it aloud to acknowledge that\'s what I/we are irresistibly staring down. After that, pardon et moi, I don\'t know any Latin, excepting \"pig Latin: ig pay atin lay.\" Awesomely rendered with a disturbingly haunting and deadly poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
August 11th, 2025 11:12
GRATIAS (GAME OVER)
Jerry Reynolds said:
Good write, Tobani.
The master asked,
\"Why is the creator doing all of this?\"
The student said.
\"I do not know.\"
The master replied,
\"Place fingers in your ears
And close your eyes.
When I clap open both at once.\"
CLAP
\"Which is more fun?\"
August 11th, 2025 07:20
Jerry Reynolds said:
Good write, Tobani.
The master asked,
\"Why is the creator doing all of this?\"
The student said.
\"I do not know.\"
The master replied,
\"Place fingers in your ears
And close your eyes.
When I clap open both at once.\"
CLAP
\"Which is more fun?\"
August 11th, 2025 07:20
GRATIAS (GAME OVER)
arqios said:
“To you, thanks I give for the jest.”
It has a slightly formal, almost ceremonial feel compared to how we’d phrase it in modern languages; like something a toga‑wearing stand‑up comic might say after a clever punchline. “I thank you for the joke”🕊️🙏🏻
August 11th, 2025 04:15
arqios said:
“To you, thanks I give for the jest.”
It has a slightly formal, almost ceremonial feel compared to how we’d phrase it in modern languages; like something a toga‑wearing stand‑up comic might say after a clever punchline. “I thank you for the joke”🕊️🙏🏻
August 11th, 2025 04:15
GRATIAS (GAME OVER)
sorenbarrett said:
Loved both the format and the message in this poem. Short and to the point it\'s wording is frustrating in reminding of messages received where access is denied on line. Password changed, wrong user name, account disabled, no record of such account on and on access denied where one had been before. The fun stops. A pertinent and poignant write Tobani
August 11th, 2025 03:43
sorenbarrett said:
Loved both the format and the message in this poem. Short and to the point it\'s wording is frustrating in reminding of messages received where access is denied on line. Password changed, wrong user name, account disabled, no record of such account on and on access denied where one had been before. The fun stops. A pertinent and poignant write Tobani
August 11th, 2025 03:43
Blank Expression.
Kevin Hulme said:
That English teacher sounds like a real jerk.
They say you always remember the good Teachers . That\'s half true as you remember the bad . My English Teacher was very helpful and didn\'t Hit you like the rest. She was also a Babe, but that\'s beside the Point.
People always say that I\'m very quiet. I usually say \' I\'m not Quiet l\'m just between sentences\'.
Anyway enough of my Ramblings: A fine Poem.
August 9th, 2025 19:59
Kevin Hulme said:
That English teacher sounds like a real jerk.
They say you always remember the good Teachers . That\'s half true as you remember the bad . My English Teacher was very helpful and didn\'t Hit you like the rest. She was also a Babe, but that\'s beside the Point.
People always say that I\'m very quiet. I usually say \' I\'m not Quiet l\'m just between sentences\'.
Anyway enough of my Ramblings: A fine Poem.
August 9th, 2025 19:59
Blank Expression.
Abdullah123 said:
As a student I really do resonate with this, how people often care more about the fact you look unhappy rather than thinking about why (it\'s often them hahaha, so I\'m glad they don\'t ask). It makes me feel even better looking at the long list of comments who reciprocate the feelings.
Great Write and Thank you
August 9th, 2025 08:56
Abdullah123 said:
As a student I really do resonate with this, how people often care more about the fact you look unhappy rather than thinking about why (it\'s often them hahaha, so I\'m glad they don\'t ask). It makes me feel even better looking at the long list of comments who reciprocate the feelings.
Great Write and Thank you
August 9th, 2025 08:56
Blank Expression.
Teddy.15 said:
My invisible self. How very wonderful to get inside your mind. I was translucent at school by many teachers however I have two or three that truly were there with me. What a wonderful subject, you took me back to being 11, kudos. 🌹
August 9th, 2025 02:30
Teddy.15 said:
My invisible self. How very wonderful to get inside your mind. I was translucent at school by many teachers however I have two or three that truly were there with me. What a wonderful subject, you took me back to being 11, kudos. 🌹
August 9th, 2025 02:30
Blank Expression.
Goldfinch60 said:
The real me is the person that many cannot see but those who know you are those who can always see the real you Tobani.
Andy
August 9th, 2025 01:25
Goldfinch60 said:
The real me is the person that many cannot see but those who know you are those who can always see the real you Tobani.
Andy
August 9th, 2025 01:25
Blank Expression.
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Nataiella, this hits with truth...and that’s always hard to shake. The way you hold that emotional distance...it’s not cold, it’s protective. The repetition of judgment and questions mirrors the weight of living unseen. You captured that inner other-world beautifully, my dear friend. Hope all has been well in my absence. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 8th, 2025 19:36
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Nataiella, this hits with truth...and that’s always hard to shake. The way you hold that emotional distance...it’s not cold, it’s protective. The repetition of judgment and questions mirrors the weight of living unseen. You captured that inner other-world beautifully, my dear friend. Hope all has been well in my absence. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 8th, 2025 19:36
Blank Expression.
Poetic Licence said:
Thank you Friendship, Violet_Writes, Cheeky Missy and Damaso for the Favs.
August 8th, 2025 13:56
Poetic Licence said:
Thank you Friendship, Violet_Writes, Cheeky Missy and Damaso for the Favs.
August 8th, 2025 13:56
Blank Expression.
Cheeky Missy said:
They\'ve a term, or rather terms, psychological labels for such behaviors, and nowadays a plethora of support groups for all of us who never were exactly \"extroverted,\" nor the most sociable [by their standards], nor as ready to render ourselves complete fools by answering or responding as if we completely understood. I doubt we\'re really that odd, but who knows. By adulthood, my loving father advised me to keep my jaw from hanging open [an unconscious gesture] lest people think me stupid when he knew otherwise. Theoretically we\'ve an ability to live freely now. Perhaps we\'ve only rather found a place where others like ourselves are. Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a vibrant poignancy. Thank you very much for sharing.
August 8th, 2025 11:01
Cheeky Missy said:
They\'ve a term, or rather terms, psychological labels for such behaviors, and nowadays a plethora of support groups for all of us who never were exactly \"extroverted,\" nor the most sociable [by their standards], nor as ready to render ourselves complete fools by answering or responding as if we completely understood. I doubt we\'re really that odd, but who knows. By adulthood, my loving father advised me to keep my jaw from hanging open [an unconscious gesture] lest people think me stupid when he knew otherwise. Theoretically we\'ve an ability to live freely now. Perhaps we\'ve only rather found a place where others like ourselves are. Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a vibrant poignancy. Thank you very much for sharing.
August 8th, 2025 11:01
Blank Expression.
arqios said:
This poem captures the quiet ache of feeling unseen and misunderstood, where detachment is not indifference but a shield against intrusion. There’s such a poignancy in the contrast between external judgment and internal complexity of what’s perceived versus what’s felt. The speaker isn’t absent, just elsewhere.
August 8th, 2025 08:06
arqios said:
This poem captures the quiet ache of feeling unseen and misunderstood, where detachment is not indifference but a shield against intrusion. There’s such a poignancy in the contrast between external judgment and internal complexity of what’s perceived versus what’s felt. The speaker isn’t absent, just elsewhere.
August 8th, 2025 08:06
Blank Expression.
Neville said:
It is not hard to see where you are coming from .. extraordinarily well com[posed and my word it looks pretty .. no easy feat to write as a child and keep such good form .. bravo Tobani .. Neville
August 8th, 2025 07:30
Neville said:
It is not hard to see where you are coming from .. extraordinarily well com[posed and my word it looks pretty .. no easy feat to write as a child and keep such good form .. bravo Tobani .. Neville
August 8th, 2025 07:30
Blank Expression.
Friendship said:
What a magnificent poem! It strikes a chord within me, and I comprehend and can identify with its essence. Your poem \"Blank Expression\" explores themes of emotional isolation, misunderstanding, and the struggle for authentic communication. It reflects the internal experience of someone who feels disconnected from others and struggles to convey their feelings or thoughts.
August 8th, 2025 07:30
Friendship said:
What a magnificent poem! It strikes a chord within me, and I comprehend and can identify with its essence. Your poem \"Blank Expression\" explores themes of emotional isolation, misunderstanding, and the struggle for authentic communication. It reflects the internal experience of someone who feels disconnected from others and struggles to convey their feelings or thoughts.
August 8th, 2025 07:30
Blank Expression.
Poetic Licence said:
Thank you for your feedback, I wrote it an english class for the teacher teaching us, he used to get great enjoyment of ridiculing me infront of the other pupil\'s, he didn\'t like the poem. Hope you have a wonderful weekend
August 8th, 2025 06:29
Poetic Licence said:
Thank you for your feedback, I wrote it an english class for the teacher teaching us, he used to get great enjoyment of ridiculing me infront of the other pupil\'s, he didn\'t like the poem. Hope you have a wonderful weekend
August 8th, 2025 06:29
Blank Expression.
sorenbarrett said:
A child who\'s elevator went to the top floor but who chose to lock the door. Clever use of metaphor for a child what\'s more. All messing around aside Tobani this was very nicely worked out for a child. It shows early indications of poetic ability. Thanks for sharing.
August 8th, 2025 04:12
sorenbarrett said:
A child who\'s elevator went to the top floor but who chose to lock the door. Clever use of metaphor for a child what\'s more. All messing around aside Tobani this was very nicely worked out for a child. It shows early indications of poetic ability. Thanks for sharing.
August 8th, 2025 04:12
Forgotten Ukraine.
Keeter C said:
The kings of the east, Putin=prince of Rosh all foretold. It will happen ☹️
August 7th, 2025 08:24
Keeter C said:
The kings of the east, Putin=prince of Rosh all foretold. It will happen ☹️
August 7th, 2025 08:24
Manners
Goldfinch60 said:
I do all of those things Tobani but the last time I go on a bus was about 5 years ago. LOL
Andy
August 7th, 2025 01:27
Goldfinch60 said:
I do all of those things Tobani but the last time I go on a bus was about 5 years ago. LOL
Andy
August 7th, 2025 01:27
Manners
Bella Shepard said:
Pay it forward my friend, you say it beautifully in verse. It costs nothing to be kind, and there is everything to be gained. Manners equates to acknowledging one another, as you so aptly state. Everything about this poem is a fave in spades!
August 6th, 2025 11:43
Bella Shepard said:
Pay it forward my friend, you say it beautifully in verse. It costs nothing to be kind, and there is everything to be gained. Manners equates to acknowledging one another, as you so aptly state. Everything about this poem is a fave in spades!
August 6th, 2025 11:43
Manners
Cheeky Missy said:
Having spent my childhood in Colorado in the \'80\'s, it was bit of a shock in the \'90\'s to learn how unfriendly the Illinoisans were, where commonplace friendliness was met with coldness, rudeness and an odd surprise since in Colorado it seemed everyone was friendly whether or not we were perfect strangers. That was then, and now it\'s become shocking. Now civility no longer exists. Everyone is horrendously rude and obnoxious until you feel left alone in the midst of your fellows. Thank you for this timely, lovely and fitting call to kindness and civility. Beautifully rendered with an excellent spirit. Thank you for sharing.
August 6th, 2025 11:12
Cheeky Missy said:
Having spent my childhood in Colorado in the \'80\'s, it was bit of a shock in the \'90\'s to learn how unfriendly the Illinoisans were, where commonplace friendliness was met with coldness, rudeness and an odd surprise since in Colorado it seemed everyone was friendly whether or not we were perfect strangers. That was then, and now it\'s become shocking. Now civility no longer exists. Everyone is horrendously rude and obnoxious until you feel left alone in the midst of your fellows. Thank you for this timely, lovely and fitting call to kindness and civility. Beautifully rendered with an excellent spirit. Thank you for sharing.
August 6th, 2025 11:12
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