Comments received on poems by G-Kaphen
One way call
plankton said:
This is really good,
L3/4 did you want the hanging 'name'?
I dig the seven months vs. ten minutes in S4 and S5. Love/hate realized
May 4th, 2016 23:04
plankton said:
This is really good,
L3/4 did you want the hanging 'name'?
I dig the seven months vs. ten minutes in S4 and S5. Love/hate realized
May 4th, 2016 23:04
A story about a girl
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WOW what a great poem about a GIRL 0 to 10 written in reverse order captivating. Each age is a stage ! 0. Birth 1. Cake ! 2. Broken hone 3. Performing - singing - dancing 4. Ballerina ! 5. ABUSE ! 6. Harsh words and no one to listen 7. Barbie - video games and Glukcons (One of the leading Industrial Races in the ODDWORLD) growing up 8. Thanks GOD for BEST FRIENDS 9. Ghost Stories with (long lost) friends in the WOODS ! 10. OMG a BICYCLE ! When I got my first big bike the World seemed 10 times smaller - AWESOME. Love the content and form of the poem ! Can I ask a question ? How much is autobiographical ? (In 7. you say "She spent MY days .......... is that a clue ?) Thanks for caring and sharing - BRIAN
April 29th, 2016 10:15
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WOW what a great poem about a GIRL 0 to 10 written in reverse order captivating. Each age is a stage ! 0. Birth 1. Cake ! 2. Broken hone 3. Performing - singing - dancing 4. Ballerina ! 5. ABUSE ! 6. Harsh words and no one to listen 7. Barbie - video games and Glukcons (One of the leading Industrial Races in the ODDWORLD) growing up 8. Thanks GOD for BEST FRIENDS 9. Ghost Stories with (long lost) friends in the WOODS ! 10. OMG a BICYCLE ! When I got my first big bike the World seemed 10 times smaller - AWESOME. Love the content and form of the poem ! Can I ask a question ? How much is autobiographical ? (In 7. you say "She spent MY days .......... is that a clue ?) Thanks for caring and sharing - BRIAN
April 29th, 2016 10:15
Wine lips
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
"There is many a slip twixt cup and lip !" Thanks for a well crafted poem flowing with emotion and angst. The scenario and analagies you paint are familiar. I have kissed lips - which should have been "sweeter than wine" but the experience beyond the kiss has been as cold as Chardonnay and not as warm as Merlot ! Your last lines sum up your poem well. "Your lips are like wine and I want to get drunk - just not with you ! Thanks for sharing - BRIAN
April 25th, 2016 10:02
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
"There is many a slip twixt cup and lip !" Thanks for a well crafted poem flowing with emotion and angst. The scenario and analagies you paint are familiar. I have kissed lips - which should have been "sweeter than wine" but the experience beyond the kiss has been as cold as Chardonnay and not as warm as Merlot ! Your last lines sum up your poem well. "Your lips are like wine and I want to get drunk - just not with you ! Thanks for sharing - BRIAN
April 25th, 2016 10:02
A poem for a loved one
Sophie said:
A candid piece, full of beautiful imagery.
April 19th, 2016 13:28
Sophie said:
A candid piece, full of beautiful imagery.
April 19th, 2016 13:28
