Comments received on poems by williammae
One Size
lysistrata said:
I think you need to work with your opening line and what about more editing?!📄
Make it more attractive to our reading eyes....I like 😏 your subject matter.I am often preoccupied with death matters and after life....
August 14th, 2016 01:26
lysistrata said:
I think you need to work with your opening line and what about more editing?!📄
Make it more attractive to our reading eyes....I like 😏 your subject matter.I am often preoccupied with death matters and after life....
August 14th, 2016 01:26
I Am Fretful In The Garden
williammae said:
Thank you for reading my poem, im not sure what you mean about the lines that bothers you. I wrote this poem in April 2011, i would appreciate it if you would let me know, thanks again
June 16th, 2016 13:24
williammae said:
Thank you for reading my poem, im not sure what you mean about the lines that bothers you. I wrote this poem in April 2011, i would appreciate it if you would let me know, thanks again
June 16th, 2016 13:24
When Angels Sighed
lysistrata said:
William,
Well done for your "Three Boxes of Tune".
I liked both the connection and the execution.
Keep Writing....
June 15th, 2016 09:20
lysistrata said:
William,
Well done for your "Three Boxes of Tune".
I liked both the connection and the execution.
Keep Writing....
June 15th, 2016 09:20
Three Boxes Of Tunes
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WOW WILLIAM - AN AWESOME POEM: So so sad and yet their memories so so precious. I still have my Mum and my Sister and your poem has made me value them both even more ! Thanks for caring and sharing. GOD puts Ladies in our lives to make us better Men - AMEN Yours BRIAN
June 13th, 2016 10:02
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WOW WILLIAM - AN AWESOME POEM: So so sad and yet their memories so so precious. I still have my Mum and my Sister and your poem has made me value them both even more ! Thanks for caring and sharing. GOD puts Ladies in our lives to make us better Men - AMEN Yours BRIAN
June 13th, 2016 10:02
Waiting To Be
lysistrata said:
"Worthless lone lost penny",
I found you!
This last phrase deserves all the money in the world....
Keep Writing.
June 11th, 2016 12:25
lysistrata said:
"Worthless lone lost penny",
I found you!
This last phrase deserves all the money in the world....
Keep Writing.
June 11th, 2016 12:25
Waiting To Be
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME FRIEND - Great first poem - love the denouement in the last line ! Love the structure of your poem ~ Four neat quatrains and a consistent rhyme pattern (xaxa xbxb etc). Easy to read nice to recite. Love the contents there was a time (not so long ago) that finding a PENNY would seem like a treasure trove now most people would even ignore a SHILLING (5 pence). Money has lost its charm and (for many) life has lost it glitter. Thanks for caring - even about a PENNY ! Yours BRIAN
June 11th, 2016 10:06
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME FRIEND - Great first poem - love the denouement in the last line ! Love the structure of your poem ~ Four neat quatrains and a consistent rhyme pattern (xaxa xbxb etc). Easy to read nice to recite. Love the contents there was a time (not so long ago) that finding a PENNY would seem like a treasure trove now most people would even ignore a SHILLING (5 pence). Money has lost its charm and (for many) life has lost it glitter. Thanks for caring - even about a PENNY ! Yours BRIAN
June 11th, 2016 10:06
