Comments received on poems by TheYoungPoet
Alone
lysistrata said:
Allow me to add another ending:
Alone.It's dark at Home
Alone,with the cat on my lap
A week dead after you gone.🐈
Keep writing,as Brian(33-UK- Single) told you....
June 28th, 2016 11:45
lysistrata said:
Allow me to add another ending:
Alone.It's dark at Home
Alone,with the cat on my lap
A week dead after you gone.🐈
Keep writing,as Brian(33-UK- Single) told you....
June 28th, 2016 11:45
Alone
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME TYP ~ THANKS FOR YOUR FIRST POEM. Nice structure ~ three neat free verse stanzas ~ each taking your story a step forward ~ sorry it's a sad one but it happens. S1. Crying for help ~ but hoping it will be the end. S2. Not being saved but blamed ~ still you hold on ! S3. Where is your Man when you need him ? Selfish He leaves you dark ~ empty ~ alone. This poem made me shiver with anger ~ Thanks for sharing ~ more please. Yours BRIAN
June 28th, 2016 11:16
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME TYP ~ THANKS FOR YOUR FIRST POEM. Nice structure ~ three neat free verse stanzas ~ each taking your story a step forward ~ sorry it's a sad one but it happens. S1. Crying for help ~ but hoping it will be the end. S2. Not being saved but blamed ~ still you hold on ! S3. Where is your Man when you need him ? Selfish He leaves you dark ~ empty ~ alone. This poem made me shiver with anger ~ Thanks for sharing ~ more please. Yours BRIAN
June 28th, 2016 11:16
