Comments received on poems by JohnThomas
Layla; Part II (The morning after. Distance and tears at dawn.)
Tony36 said:
Wonderful write
August 25th, 2016 07:03
Tony36 said:
Wonderful write
August 25th, 2016 07:03
Layla; Part II (The morning after. Distance and tears at dawn.)
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
THANKS JOHN ~Poets don't always deliver PART 2 ! We have moved from PASSION to PATHOS beautifully illustrated in the visual ! STANZA 2. A dream S3. Time is ruuuuuuuuning out ! S4. Wide spread thighs and taste of love honey S5. Can we stop time ? I think not ! S6. Blissful hope ~ nothing shall disappoint S7. Memories of time past ~ smiles ~ curls ~ touch ~ orgasmic penetration ! (visions of part 1) S8. Reality ~ misshapen ~ scoliotis ~ no real skills S9. A mess ~ a loser ~ a hope ? S10. Grace ~ soul ~ hope springs eternal S11. Celestial engagement (senility ?) Sun ~ Moon ~ Stars I WILL REMAIN TRUE ! Mission unaccomplished ? Thanks for sharing ~ BRIAN
August 25th, 2016 04:00
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
THANKS JOHN ~Poets don't always deliver PART 2 ! We have moved from PASSION to PATHOS beautifully illustrated in the visual ! STANZA 2. A dream S3. Time is ruuuuuuuuning out ! S4. Wide spread thighs and taste of love honey S5. Can we stop time ? I think not ! S6. Blissful hope ~ nothing shall disappoint S7. Memories of time past ~ smiles ~ curls ~ touch ~ orgasmic penetration ! (visions of part 1) S8. Reality ~ misshapen ~ scoliotis ~ no real skills S9. A mess ~ a loser ~ a hope ? S10. Grace ~ soul ~ hope springs eternal S11. Celestial engagement (senility ?) Sun ~ Moon ~ Stars I WILL REMAIN TRUE ! Mission unaccomplished ? Thanks for sharing ~ BRIAN
August 25th, 2016 04:00
Layla; Part I (Dreamed I was dreaming of you. Time lost in various positions.)
Mads said:
I love this. It has great imagery, I could picture it all!
August 24th, 2016 17:54
Mads said:
I love this. It has great imagery, I could picture it all!
August 24th, 2016 17:54
Layla; Part I (Dreamed I was dreaming of you. Time lost in various positions.)
lysistrata said:
Teddy,
I am pretty certain that your Writing has the potential to be shortlisted for the BAD SEX in FICTION AWARD... I too have written a sex scene with a Man Booker,whose relation with Sex is "O" Level......👎👎👎👎👎😱
August 24th, 2016 09:33
lysistrata said:
Teddy,
I am pretty certain that your Writing has the potential to be shortlisted for the BAD SEX in FICTION AWARD... I too have written a sex scene with a Man Booker,whose relation with Sex is "O" Level......👎👎👎👎👎😱
August 24th, 2016 09:33
Layla; Part I (Dreamed I was dreaming of you. Time lost in various positions.)
Tony36 said:
Great write, can't wait to read the rest
August 24th, 2016 09:16
Tony36 said:
Great write, can't wait to read the rest
August 24th, 2016 09:16
Layla; Part I (Dreamed I was dreaming of you. Time lost in various positions.)
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks JOHN you have injected a bit of Italian Spice into MPS ~ so sensuous. "You dreamed now you are awake I missed you ! We must go this may not be our home. The Old Town now as always back on the road again !" I have made love to an Italian Girl (ANNA) it's not what they say it's how they say it. Also thay have a special quality as lovers ! You hint at it in your beautiful poem ! Such kissable lips ~ such open petals ~ such deep deep eyes ~ such yielding bodies ~ why can't they all be Neopolitan Girls ? Grazie per la condivisione del tuo poesia d'amore ~ Tuo Amico BRIAN
August 24th, 2016 05:32
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks JOHN you have injected a bit of Italian Spice into MPS ~ so sensuous. "You dreamed now you are awake I missed you ! We must go this may not be our home. The Old Town now as always back on the road again !" I have made love to an Italian Girl (ANNA) it's not what they say it's how they say it. Also thay have a special quality as lovers ! You hint at it in your beautiful poem ! Such kissable lips ~ such open petals ~ such deep deep eyes ~ such yielding bodies ~ why can't they all be Neopolitan Girls ? Grazie per la condivisione del tuo poesia d'amore ~ Tuo Amico BRIAN
August 24th, 2016 05:32
Layla; Part I (Dreamed I was dreaming of you. Time lost in various positions.)
lysistrata said:
Teddy,
1. Revise JOHN UPDIKE or Philip Roth?!
2. Change title into:
"Lay,Layla...Lay" or
"The adventures of Layla in Layland"
August 24th, 2016 03:37
lysistrata said:
Teddy,
1. Revise JOHN UPDIKE or Philip Roth?!
2. Change title into:
"Lay,Layla...Lay" or
"The adventures of Layla in Layland"
August 24th, 2016 03:37
Somedays
lysistrata said:
Teddy,are you ready?
I breathe into You.😙
Closer.I breathe AGAIN....😚
Ah! Brand NEW Freddy 😇
And Teddy,
1.Is it a Jack Kerouac Week?
2.Last night we listened Tony Bennett:
"The shadow of your smile
When you are gone
Will color all my dreams
And light the dawn...." Nice,eh?😸
August 23rd, 2016 09:55
lysistrata said:
Teddy,are you ready?
I breathe into You.😙
Closer.I breathe AGAIN....😚
Ah! Brand NEW Freddy 😇
And Teddy,
1.Is it a Jack Kerouac Week?
2.Last night we listened Tony Bennett:
"The shadow of your smile
When you are gone
Will color all my dreams
And light the dawn...." Nice,eh?😸
August 23rd, 2016 09:55
Somedays
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Great poem JOHN of the inevitability of MALE AGING and its consequences ! I'm only (DV) one third through my life (33) and already I feel the twinges. Your final stanza reminded me of the culmination of Shakespeare's "Seven Ages of Man". "Last scene of all that ends this strange eventful history. Is second childishness and mere oblivion ! Sans teeth ~ sans eyes ~ sans taste ~ sans everything. Ladies are different they are growing old disgracefully and still thinking of England "going for GOLD" ! Some of my older Male Friends (60+) seem to cope better and make the most of their dotage. You are not dead ~ yet ~ so CARPE DIEM and make the most of each opportunity ! Thanks for sharing BRIAN. Please check my FUSION ~ MY FAVORITE DRINK ~ thanks.
August 23rd, 2016 05:02
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Great poem JOHN of the inevitability of MALE AGING and its consequences ! I'm only (DV) one third through my life (33) and already I feel the twinges. Your final stanza reminded me of the culmination of Shakespeare's "Seven Ages of Man". "Last scene of all that ends this strange eventful history. Is second childishness and mere oblivion ! Sans teeth ~ sans eyes ~ sans taste ~ sans everything. Ladies are different they are growing old disgracefully and still thinking of England "going for GOLD" ! Some of my older Male Friends (60+) seem to cope better and make the most of their dotage. You are not dead ~ yet ~ so CARPE DIEM and make the most of each opportunity ! Thanks for sharing BRIAN. Please check my FUSION ~ MY FAVORITE DRINK ~ thanks.
August 23rd, 2016 05:02
Dance With Me
rrodriguez said:
Saudade! wow... that's very descriptive and fits the poem very neat. It reminded me when I visited my wife many moons ago and I would find her in the rain just the way you describe the scene. I really enjoy reading because it has personality, surprise and leave you wondering. Rain is so poetic and the scene you used is so descriptive. Thank you... Very well done!
August 22nd, 2016 06:41
rrodriguez said:
Saudade! wow... that's very descriptive and fits the poem very neat. It reminded me when I visited my wife many moons ago and I would find her in the rain just the way you describe the scene. I really enjoy reading because it has personality, surprise and leave you wondering. Rain is so poetic and the scene you used is so descriptive. Thank you... Very well done!
August 22nd, 2016 06:41
Dance With Me
lysistrata said:
Saudade?! YOU?
Who looks like Ted Hughes?!
Thank God,
I am NOT
Sylvia Plath...
August 22nd, 2016 03:37
lysistrata said:
Saudade?! YOU?
Who looks like Ted Hughes?!
Thank God,
I am NOT
Sylvia Plath...
August 22nd, 2016 03:37
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