Desire Paths
E Naughton said:

Thank you for sharing, I got lost in it, beautifully written

November 5th, 2022 17:06

Capitalistic Endeavours
L. B. Mek said:

(an important write, thanks for sharing
if you want a really clear example of how ludicrous
capitalism impact on domesticated wildlife has been, lookup
the history of the humble Turkey, to quote:
\'As turkey production took off, breeding programs focused instead on packing as much meat as possible onto the bird’s frame. Breeders in the late 1920s began breeding birds that grew rapidly and had large breasts; the nickname for one variety was “Bronze Mae West,” but the industry eventually agreed on calling these new birds Broad Breasted Bronze.\')
( https://modernfarmer.com/2014/11/turkeys-got-broad-white-breasts/ )
(and thanks for inspiring my little rant below)
see Capitalism, in its Uncorrupted ideological State, is actually
a tool for Goodness, with immense Potential for impacting
lives of the most Needy, directly
in such a Positive and practically accessible format;
as evidenced by just how many people, Globally
it has offered a tangible path - out
of that abject poverty, they inherited at birth..
BUT!!!!!
In it\'s current State, where Greed for evermore Opulent
and diabolical levels of wilful ignorance
utilised to cocoon individuals in the Obliviousness needed
to outright - selfishly Deny, the disparity in society
lavishly extravagant Lifestyles can perpetuate, is
staggeringly and Morosely: Pathetic..


May 13th, 2021 04:44

Daddy, Can I Go Outside?
jarcher54 said:

So intense and bitter it is haunting and beautiful and painful. Elusive talents, bloated tummy, stinking piles... I guess we all have known someone who gets way with it... forfeiting consequences as you so beautifully put it. Real art takes courage, and this is as brave as a personal poem can be. I am glad you shared it. I hope you know you can trust your readers to sympathize and support.

May 8th, 2021 01:05

Body Song
L. B. Mek said:

you have a talent for vividly immersive phrasing and uniquely quirky imagery,
thanks for sharing

December 1st, 2020 06:17

Dead
ebbsmillz said:

I absolutely love the way this poem sounds when read. Well done dude.

February 21st, 2017 11:42

Lungs
Augustus said:

This could be a metaphor for feeling undeserving of the love of another person who shines compared to your alien features. Whatever I thoroughly enjoyed your poem.

February 20th, 2017 22:18

Dead
pastaclouds said:

This is amazing. I love your imagery and flowbof the piece.
~Vannessa

October 18th, 2016 18:14

You
lovedud said:

Thank you very much for your comments it means a lot.

September 29th, 2016 22:01

You
willyweed said:

this is very well written, nice style and flow
fleeting love yet hope gives a slight hint
more please. ww

September 29th, 2016 18:59

Winter
Augustus said:

I am having a little trouble understanding. Perhaps all bundled up inside in the winter, unable to shed your heavy clothes and stiff boots, and never quite thawing out come spring. Perhaps a metaphor for someone's life living in a shell. Thanks for sharing.

September 28th, 2016 20:13

Wondering Colors
lovedud said:

Thank you both so much

September 15th, 2016 23:21

Wondering Colors
ebbsmillz said:

This poem is amazing, I'm definitely going to add this to my favorites. It was breathtaking and I could really feel your feelings. Keep writing (please).

September 15th, 2016 21:25

Face
Augustus said:

There is such a longing for something that you know in the end will never work. The twisted knife was chilling. Oh! You got me!


September 13th, 2016 18:39

Face
lovedud said:

Thank you both so much. It means a lot to me to get such positive feedback!

September 13th, 2016 17:32

Face
Jeff said:

His is a very well done write....excellent work here

September 13th, 2016 17:22