Comments received on poems by Kira
the scarred vile
P.X. Vexxus said:
Another vivid piece. The story sucked me in from beginning to end.
Criticism: It\'s hard to read. The words are mashed together making it hard to follow. I usually put a space between my lines to avoid this :)
February 13th, 2017 05:34
P.X. Vexxus said:
Another vivid piece. The story sucked me in from beginning to end.
Criticism: It\'s hard to read. The words are mashed together making it hard to follow. I usually put a space between my lines to avoid this :)
February 13th, 2017 05:34
Skeptical cry
P.X. Vexxus said:
An interesting write. Vivid and made me think. If I had to criticize anything, it would be the re-use of the word \"sewn\". Other than that, I really enjoyed it and I hope to read some more of your work :)
February 13th, 2017 05:25
P.X. Vexxus said:
An interesting write. Vivid and made me think. If I had to criticize anything, it would be the re-use of the word \"sewn\". Other than that, I really enjoyed it and I hope to read some more of your work :)
February 13th, 2017 05:25
the denier~
Augustus said:
I loved the line of the burned memories scattered around.
January 2nd, 2017 22:49
Augustus said:
I loved the line of the burned memories scattered around.
January 2nd, 2017 22:49
the denier~
willyweed said:
very good story in the telling
enjoyed reading it. well done ww
January 2nd, 2017 16:48
willyweed said:
very good story in the telling
enjoyed reading it. well done ww
January 2nd, 2017 16:48
The sentimental phantom.
SabreLi said:
By the time life is done with us we are all tortured phantoms; I love it! Nicely done xx
December 15th, 2016 09:09
SabreLi said:
By the time life is done with us we are all tortured phantoms; I love it! Nicely done xx
December 15th, 2016 09:09
The sentimental phantom.
Daniel said:
I really liked this poem, as Tony said great write!
December 12th, 2016 21:42
Daniel said:
I really liked this poem, as Tony said great write!
December 12th, 2016 21:42
The denied siren~
Augustus said:
Many of us have those days when we think that we are give leave of our sanity yet some how go on without much hope. Nicely done.
December 8th, 2016 16:45
Augustus said:
Many of us have those days when we think that we are give leave of our sanity yet some how go on without much hope. Nicely done.
December 8th, 2016 16:45
Beyond the portal~
willyweed said:
interesting and mysterious. I like it! ww
December 1st, 2016 10:56
willyweed said:
interesting and mysterious. I like it! ww
December 1st, 2016 10:56
the battered angel
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
AWESOME FANTASY KIRA ~ I love all poems about ANGELS. They are very real ~ The Angels of Light from JAHWEH who guide us into paths of righteousness and the Angels of Darkness from SATANA who seek to lead us astray into eveil and perversion. SATANA was once LUCIFER the Chief Angel of Light but (due to PRIDE) he fell and was cast out of Heaven. So as your challenging poem states ~ there can be movement from Light to Darkness in the Angelic Realm. We understand very little of the Spiritual Dimension ~ but it is good to speculate ! Thanks for sharing ~ HUGS ~ BRIAN
November 27th, 2016 11:02
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
AWESOME FANTASY KIRA ~ I love all poems about ANGELS. They are very real ~ The Angels of Light from JAHWEH who guide us into paths of righteousness and the Angels of Darkness from SATANA who seek to lead us astray into eveil and perversion. SATANA was once LUCIFER the Chief Angel of Light but (due to PRIDE) he fell and was cast out of Heaven. So as your challenging poem states ~ there can be movement from Light to Darkness in the Angelic Realm. We understand very little of the Spiritual Dimension ~ but it is good to speculate ! Thanks for sharing ~ HUGS ~ BRIAN
November 27th, 2016 11:02
The deceived world
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WONNDERFUL IMAGARY KIRA ~ Love it ~ love you too ! Yearning for Redemption ~ Scream of my tired soul ~ Reflections of the burned thoughts ~ Surrendering to this unrealistic ~ Waiting .............. for RELEASE ! Only one thing could release you KIRA and that is PURE WHITE HOT ~ LOVE ! Thanks for sharing HUGS ~ BRIAN
November 26th, 2016 10:56
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WONNDERFUL IMAGARY KIRA ~ Love it ~ love you too ! Yearning for Redemption ~ Scream of my tired soul ~ Reflections of the burned thoughts ~ Surrendering to this unrealistic ~ Waiting .............. for RELEASE ! Only one thing could release you KIRA and that is PURE WHITE HOT ~ LOVE ! Thanks for sharing HUGS ~ BRIAN
November 26th, 2016 10:56
The mute cry
littlegoat23 said:
Beautiful. I\'m sorry for your loss I understand the pain you are feeling.
November 25th, 2016 13:16
littlegoat23 said:
Beautiful. I\'m sorry for your loss I understand the pain you are feeling.
November 25th, 2016 13:16
The mute cry
SabreLi said:
Once again you write a wonderful piece with a fascinating climax and unique perspective !:D Please continue to write and share your beautiful work with us xx
November 24th, 2016 16:03
SabreLi said:
Once again you write a wonderful piece with a fascinating climax and unique perspective !:D Please continue to write and share your beautiful work with us xx
November 24th, 2016 16:03
The mute cry
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
IT HAPPENS KIRA ~ And the loss and hurt seems to last for ever and it seems to be worse for Ladies ! My attitude is \"Better to have loved and lost than never toi have loved at all\" ~ BUT ~ I still have JENNIFER\'S Negligee and the perfume stll clings ~ SAD HUGS ~ BRIAN
November 24th, 2016 08:21
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
IT HAPPENS KIRA ~ And the loss and hurt seems to last for ever and it seems to be worse for Ladies ! My attitude is \"Better to have loved and lost than never toi have loved at all\" ~ BUT ~ I still have JENNIFER\'S Negligee and the perfume stll clings ~ SAD HUGS ~ BRIAN
November 24th, 2016 08:21
The condemned~
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME KIRA ~ Thanks you for a very powrful first poem ! Beautifully phrased ~ but bursting with self doubt and self harm. In retrospect it reflects how many of us feel but we domt always write about it. You will see friom the responses you have received ~ that we are a very supportive and empathetic site. We accept your poem at face value and seek to encourage and bless. In the sight of GOD we are all condemned but oinly God can redeem us by His Spirit and as we seek to please Him so He blesses us ! Working in the healing Profession is a great calling and you will find your redemption in the work that you do bringing love and healing to others. I am a Teacher and the rewards are the same. Every Blessing ~ Yours BRIAN (UK)
November 22nd, 2016 12:24
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME KIRA ~ Thanks you for a very powrful first poem ! Beautifully phrased ~ but bursting with self doubt and self harm. In retrospect it reflects how many of us feel but we domt always write about it. You will see friom the responses you have received ~ that we are a very supportive and empathetic site. We accept your poem at face value and seek to encourage and bless. In the sight of GOD we are all condemned but oinly God can redeem us by His Spirit and as we seek to please Him so He blesses us ! Working in the healing Profession is a great calling and you will find your redemption in the work that you do bringing love and healing to others. I am a Teacher and the rewards are the same. Every Blessing ~ Yours BRIAN (UK)
November 22nd, 2016 12:24
The condemned~
SabreLi said:
I love your dark style, I usually write similar and will post some in time as we can only post one per day here. I like the imagery invoked by your writing. Although you write of internal pain it is a wonderful thing to turn it into something beautiful. A good reminder that there isn\'t always a happy ending, but we go on regardless of the hand we are dealt. I would like to read more of your work :) xx
November 22nd, 2016 10:29
SabreLi said:
I love your dark style, I usually write similar and will post some in time as we can only post one per day here. I like the imagery invoked by your writing. Although you write of internal pain it is a wonderful thing to turn it into something beautiful. A good reminder that there isn\'t always a happy ending, but we go on regardless of the hand we are dealt. I would like to read more of your work :) xx
November 22nd, 2016 10:29
The condemned~
Augustus said:
Wow! This is beautifully done. Yearning for salvation that only leads to more condemnation. I definitely sense the hopelessness and was reassured in the author\'s notes that this was fantasy. I have studied Spanish for 7 years and recently attempted a poem in that language. It was impossible for me. I applaud you.
November 22nd, 2016 10:26
Augustus said:
Wow! This is beautifully done. Yearning for salvation that only leads to more condemnation. I definitely sense the hopelessness and was reassured in the author\'s notes that this was fantasy. I have studied Spanish for 7 years and recently attempted a poem in that language. It was impossible for me. I applaud you.
November 22nd, 2016 10:26
