Enlightened (For Unsub)

There he lays in his blackened room,

No light touches him

As his dark thoughts assail his mind,

Taking him down to the abyss of hell.


There he stands in the light of the world,

The darkness avoids him

As his mind is filled with glory,

Taking him up into natures heaven.


The two of them,

Opposite in nature,

But together in words.


His darkened thoughts move into reality

As his mind keeps falling,

Into the darkened chasm,

Which pulls life from him.


His enlightened thoughts move into reality,

His mind keeps rising,

Up into the star filled future,

Instilling more life into him.


The two of them,

Opposite in nature,

But together in words.


The blackness encroaches evermore,

Until his soul enters the ether.

The lightness abounds in him,

Freeing his soul into the ether.


The two souls approach,

And come together as one,

Normality prevails.



  • Laura


    This is a beautiful write and very much appreciated!
    I’m positive our Hooded friend will appreciate it also!

    A great clip to accentuate your poem.
    Excellent work!


    Love to Joyce and you!
    Enjoy this beautiful day!

    • Goldfinch60

      Thank you Laura, you are most kind.

      The group playing are Red Priest and if you just listen to them without seeing them I reckon there are at least a dozen of them instead of just four, I have never yet been able to see them live but maybe one day.

      • Laura

        I love their “hooded” outfits. Very appropriate for your write’s intent!

        Is the group named Red Priest because of Vivaldi’s Prete Rosso?

        I hope you’ll get to see them live.

      • 2 more comments

      • orchidee

        We're part of the 'light brigade'. Nope, not the one at Balaclava in 1854, though we were both there too! I know we don't rubbish 'dark' poems, but we tend towards the light, and desire others to also :)

        • Goldfinch60

          Unsub is different , he is an excellent poet and in some ways we complement each other.

        • Michael Edwards

          Something different and a super write Andy.

          • Goldfinch60

            Thank you Michael, it is good to come out of the norm occasionally.

          • Claudelle DeLuna

            Great poem! Gold
            nicely written & lovely music
            Bless Day,

            • Goldfinch60

              Thank you Claudelle, most kind.

            • Alexander

              This is marvelous poem. Weird that the best ideas come at the oddest time of the day.

              • Goldfinch60

                Thank you Alexander, it is surprising how many ideas and answers come to me at that time in the morning.

              • Unsub


                so sorry you awoke with a nightmare at 3am this morning with me on your mind!!

                Love the balance offered in this piece allowing two sides to work alone yet in a symbiotic way.

                Opposite in nature; but together in words! perfect!

                Think you have a typo: Their he stands... There?

                Thanks so much for spending your valuable beauty sleep time on me! Most appreciated.

                I'm sure I will reply in verse at some point with a part two.



                • Goldfinch60


                  That 3 am time seems to be a time in my life when Calliope is around and taps me on the shoulder saying "What about writing this?" so it was no nightmare.

                  Thank you for your kind comments, words (and music) are important to both of us, long may it be so.

                  Typo corrected.

                  Looking forward to part two



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