Dancing.
Atop the lake today splayed a dancing net
of flickering sparky diamonds
as sun and breeze played flashing duet
while surface teemed with gems.
Light having fun with liquid glass reflected
in myriads glints of its measure.
By the jiving mass of frenetic performance
sunbeams exposed stars
cast to dart swifter than normal.
Clouds loosed quivers of brilliant glitter
and sudden change-induced
taste made wet explode in shimmer.
Around million radiant winking jewels
silver flashed quickly to gilt
and for a while ripples made blindingly
wild offered gleams of play
on mirrored lake-face in cosmic light.
Then breezes died and sun
in hiding meant the dancing was done
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Fay Slimm. (
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A fine write and dance Fay.
Beautiful write Fay, I was there with you.
A MASTERPIECE FAY ~ In Structure & Subject. It is a FLUID POEM and the verses reflect this in their rhythm ~ rhyme ~ half rhyme & resonance. The verse length, looks random (4~2~3~3~5~2) BUT ~ when I recited it aloud it wasn't ! It was dictated, mystically, by the narrative and was perfect. At my age & stage poetically, I marvel, but never seek to compete !
WATER is an awesome COMPOUND on which all LIFE on EARTH depends ~ which is belied by the simplicity of its molecular structure H~O~H. Liquid water is fluid and adopts any shape ~ it also reflect light from its undulating surface ! It is these properties (and others) which produce all the mini-miracles which scintillate throughout your gem ! Sparky diamonds ~ Liquid glass ~ Sunbeams exposed stars ~ Quivers of brilliant glitter ~ Radiant winking jewels. I love the denouement "Then breezes died and sun in hiding ~ meant the dancing was done ~ AMEN". Your POETRY FAY is both an Inspiration and a Blessing to us all. Thanks for caring & sharing ~ I say to myself ~ What a Wonderful World ~ Yours as always BRIAN & ANGELA.
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