dusk arising

silent night


smiling with the butterflies
laughter enlights her cobalt eyes     
glance ecstasy personified
in barefoot dancing pale levi's

.       as outside silent night sweeps by
.       in duvet slumbers dreams i lie
.       where years desires carefree fly
.           till dawning's kiss
.                    of sweet goodbye

each motion making mockery
a passion hence denied in me
till lovers final harmony
enraged my thundering timpani

.        as outside silent night sweeps by
.        quiet calls a stifled cry
.        memory time cannot deny
.              of dawnings kiss
.                      and last goodbye


  • Goldfinch60

    Wonderful emotive write.

  • orchidee

    A fine write dusk.

    • dusk arising

      Thanks for reading Orchidee

    • Michael Edwards

      Reads so well - great work dusk

      • dusk arising

        Thank you ME. Appreciated.

      • kevin browne

        Perfection on a piece of paper. I'm quite taken aback from the beauty in it from the first word till the last.

        • dusk arising

          Thats high praise and i thank you.

        • Christina8

          What a stunning poem! Very descriptive and heartfelt. Loved it!

          • dusk arising

            Thank you Christina. I think it must have overpowered some, it appears 24 people viewed it but only 5 have commented.
            Definately heartfelt you are right there. All the stuff of dreams is from our hearts after all.

          • ron parrish aka wordman

            i enjoyed the write

          • Santita

            This is magical. Loaded with beautiful imagery and striking emotion. I feel the longing in this as if it were my own. Very dreamy write!

            • dusk arising

              Oh yes, such things happen i my duvet slumbers. Tip-toe-ing thru my tulips, who is this lady. One day perhaps?

            • marijoy

              Nostalgic, emotional from the beginning to the end. Enjoyed the reading.

              • dusk arising

                Thank you for reading me. Always good to see poetic friends enjoying a piece which fell onto the page for me.

              • Joe Dawson

                Beautiful, I am enthralled. A magical conjuration from a pen of seriously deep poetic sensitivity. Joe

                • dusk arising

                  Just some of the thoughts which lodge in the brain as sleepy brain patterns change to the mornings reality and one has to reluctantly let go.
                  Really nice comment, thank you.

                • Gary Edward Geraci

                  Great write Dusk. Enjoyed seeing an orchestral percussion instrument make its way into your poem.

                  • dusk arising

                    I hope the climactic sexual timpani sensation isn't something Thanks for your appreciation.

                    • Gary Edward Geraci

                      No worries Dusk - it doesn’t offend me.

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                    • Neville

                      I can not tell a lie... this was thoroughly enjoyed... a delicious little read on my return to these shores and true...

                    • Neville

                      interesting, tell me ..when did you last see a butterfly smile

                      • dusk arising

                        Never, the opening line is about smiling in the presence of the little winged beauties. It's a dream sequence.
                        One would hope that having reached maturity from maggot and pupae stage, the little critters were a tad on the happy side - till some beautiful passing bird makes a meal of them. Makes 'dressing up for dinner' take on a whole new hue.

                        • Neville

                          phew.. relief.. I thought some one had dropped an acid tab in ya coffee...

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