FOR SHE WOULD BE NO ODALISQUE
Haunted by the falling stars
her hopes and fears
like meteors
in transient passage soon dispersed
absolved from importunate hold
no more his lies which pleased her ill
of finely seasoned flattery
like poisoned draughts of nectar served
beneath the cold autumnal skies
now lost eternally in mists
for she would be no odalisque.
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Michael Edwards (
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Arggh! Fido barked to warn me of 'odalisque'. I looked it up and swooned. heehee. Is this about you and Miss Berles? Or me and her?!
No not about me - it's about Athelstan and Arsinta Gear.
All these people I don't know. You known Ms Gear long?
"Finely seasoned flattery" phrases the treatment of many on the concubine list in an Eastern Palace and this finely tuned warning of poisoned outcome gives proof which poetically put could not be bettered - - great first read of my morning dear Michael - - - and that wonderful line-art of yours is my daily delight.
You are so so kind dear Fay - your comments are so encouraging.
I find the HAREM : SCAREM
I would not risk
To be a Rich Man's
ODALISQUE !
Thanks UNCLE MIKE you have excelled
yourself today Pictorally & Poetically
Perfect POEM and I have fallen in Love
With the beautiful CHEE CHEE DUCKS !
Please check my Exercise Poem
Not that you need it : always TRIM !
Love & Blessings : ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
You are so kind - your super comments are so much appreciated.
The opening was such a contrast from the image of the title.
Such a beautiful write, it is more than bittersweet. It reminds me of young girls who fall victim to grooming. In the past they would have been demonised and shamed but your falling stars mark the loss of their innocent dreams in a poisonous world.
It reminded me of a song by birdy too.
I\'ve been getting such generous comments for this one - just wish I could write like this all the time but shortage of time is a limiter - thanks so much Sylvia - it\'ll have to be a light piece tomorrow.
Beautifully crafted poetry ME. So often we see a lengthy piece of writing from young ladies in MPS who will be no odalisque. But whilst they feel the pain, they lack your poetic ability.
I do feel that much of the poetry is written as a means of personal therapy. Although there's nothing wrong with that it would be great to see more poetry written predominantly out of a love for poetry itself where the writer is prepared to explore our rich language and where the subject matter takes on a lesser importance. Am I making sense?
Yes, your comment makes a lot of sense. Personally most of my output is subject based, some of which is quite personal and very theraputic. At other times i enjoy writing the totally creative poetry you describe.
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