Yielding.
Seeding themselves in first inkling of
notions onto a page
Appear beautiful wordlings, striving to
paint searing white space.
Thru' half-heard guidance human unites
with controlled phrasing
as beautiful Muse dances her will before
moving deeper to infiltrate
faintly heard links that help poets create.
Wine of romance ferments, odes surface
to saline shanties, tender
bouquets of nature's changed splendour
relates fall or lined laments
On lost love grief personify for metaphor
flows from communication.
Exposing raw heart to the eyes of a world
as in open-soul poetry
needs spells of silence yet yielding knows
Muse disdains opposition so
ears bend close as humility starts to grow.
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Fay Slimm. (
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This is really beautiful FAY : It expresses perfectly how a Love Poem develops in my mind : and then into draft on paper ! The draft then FERMENTS (writing a perfect poem is like making perfect wine : I have lots of drafts fermenting !). When i write a LOVE POEM I do bare my heart. I pray that I might have your : Way With Words : to fully express (in a sonnet) the depth : height : breadth of my deep love for BRIAN ! Thanks for caring : Love ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
Many thanks for this discerning comment dear Angela -- your aptitude for serious critique shows most clearly lately as you divide and review by section and thus get the best from each phrase and stanza of your chosen read - - you certainly do write from the heart my friend - wising you much progress in the pursuit of verse-`analysis which begets needed self-confidence in transcribing notions into artistic forms.... be sure that zeal reaps success and you have that in abundance. Lots of warm hugs - - Fay XXXXX
A fine write Fay. I'm silly! I swoon at some love poems. Maybe they are 'lurve' poems, as they say. I should 'leave my sheltered life a bit, get my coat, and get out more', as they say! lol.
Swoon if you will dear Orchi and know friends here will catch you - love plays a large part in serious writing and your kind support is always appreciated . Thank you for the visit and read my friend.
I'm a dark horse - yes? I'm having you on, you poets. Bet I don't swoon so soon sometimes! lol.
Sheer beauty dear Fay.
Your kind comment heightens my resolve to keep writing -so pleased you found value in the form and content of a tribute to help from out Muse - - thank you my friend.
Comment well deserved - keep writing.
Beautiful 💜
Warm thanks dear Sylvia for the visit and read.
We are in the mists of soul bearers here and you bare yours very well. Good write Fay.
Your support for my work touches my heart - thank you dear friend.
Wonderfully expressed poem, Fay. The line "Exposing raw heart to the eyes of the world," says it all.
Love is a double-edged sword. 🙂
Yes it takes courage to bare a heart to the public and we writers are often called upon to describe core-emotions - - than,k you Tamara for your comment and for your kind encouragement.
You're welcome Fay. The public expects no less from poets. 🙂
Beautiful Fay, just beautiful.
Calliope looks down on me as I write, I have a picture of her on my wall.
Yes dear Goldi - our Muse has much aid if only we take time to seek it in silence. Thanks for the comment and read my friend.
I sense you have a particularly harmonious and otherwise joyous relationship with your own poetic muse... these words are not simply beautiful, they are indeed timeless.....Neville
You sense correctly my friend in that lots of my words seem to write themselves after a time spent in silence with our Muse........... your kind feed-back is really appreciated Neville and thanks for the visit and read.
My very sincere pleasure Fay and true... Neville
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