A STRANGER

Michael Edwards

 

 

 

A STRANGER

 

 

A blackened cloud-wrapped vaulted sky

save in the east where furnaces

threw shades of thermogenic blush

as constellations float behind

a blackened cloud-wrapped vaulted sky

 

The stranger stood in wet surtout

no candle burned within his gaze

his back towards the furnaced sky

in mired  ruts where carts had passed

the stranger stood in wet surtout.

 

A mill of aspect undefined

no chink of light was seen within

where cogs and stone were disengaged

the stranger stood in dark before

a mill of aspect undefined.

 

In need of toil the stranger left

His planned return at break of dawn.

 

 

 

( My own form which I call an Ednet. It consists

of 17 lines in 4 stanzas of 5, 5, 5, and 2 lines. The only other ‘rule‘

being that in the first 3 stanzas line 1 is repeated in line5.)

  • Author: Michael Edwards (Offline Offline)
  • Published: December 15th, 2018 01:21
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Comments7

  • Goldfinch60

    Intriguing write Michael.

    • Michael Edwards

      I feel sorry for him - long journey looking for work and he arrived too late - aw piffle.

    • orchidee

      A fine write and pic M. It's all right for some folk, surtouting "mostly". I wondered what he was up to, until I looked up the word!
      The pic fits the poem - done on purpose?

      • Michael Edwards

        Not really - as for surtout I came across this in Shirley by Charlotte Bronte - lovely word for a great garment - going to see if I can get one on Amazon

        • orchidee

          I thought, if the pic was a bit rainy, it might enhance and match the poem even more. You seen Sir Toot?

        • dusk arising

          Aye 'appen lad.... in need of t'oil... To light his lamp i suppose.
          'Ope he dint catch cold in t'wet coat.

          • Michael Edwards

            Nay but he had t'find a place f't night - 'ope it weren't under yon hedge.

          • ANGELA & BRIAN

            THANKS UNCLE MIKE : For a perfect Picture & Poem in a Perfect Form. I am learning so so much about Poetry from MPS ! Its Saturday evening here and mid-Summer another day sailing in Auckland Bay with Ruth & her Cousins. It doesnt feel like CHRISTMAS : Wish BRIAN was here ! I love the nostalgia in your poem : the work & toil of yesteryear !
            Love through the MUSE : ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
            English Village PUBS are so unique and always warm & welcoming and I always get "chatted up" whether Im alone or with BRIAN ! Friendliest places on Earth !

            • Michael Edwards

              I love the language of yesteryear - that's why the Brontes, hardy, Webb et al are my favourite authors. Thanks for all your kind words Angela - and I am so envious of your activities in NZ .

            • orchidee

              You itching and scratching M? I am a bit. Not the dreaded urticaria, when it's very chilly. I only get it slightly.
              If it's not due to the weather, I must have fleas! One suggestion says 'Avoid triggers'. I will never get out the front door. Doh!

              • Michael Edwards

                Yes it has started to kick in. Not too bad at the moment - just round my ankles which is probably the most exposed part (only socks and flapping trousers) as I keep wrapped. You okay? Want a flea trap? Did you get them from Fido?

                • orchidee

                  Ahh - a dilemma for me then if it's fleas. Get rid of Fido and risk swooning, or keep him and itch. My forearms get the itching first it seems. I don't get much of a rash though. You know Urtie (Gertie) Caria?

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                • Laura🌻

                  Michael,

                  MAGNIFICENCE at its best!

                  Your command of the language and your ability to convey a message with it is extraordinary and a beautiful painting to go along with it!

                  ~Laura~

                  P.S. - I love your “Ednet” form!

                  • Michael Edwards

                    Laura you're an absolute darling - it's comments like yours which make it all worthwhile and encourage me to keep writing. Mind you I do take quite a while putting poetry like this together which is why I like the short pieces I write and which act as great fillers.

                  • ron parrish aka wordman

                    you learn every day



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