A COLLECTION
Picturesque landscapes
Coated in fabrics of oak
Commanding prospect.
Honeycombed ceiling
Arms declaring ownership
Moulded in plaster.
Equanimity
Content with functions of life
A broken heart healed.
Treated as coeval
Age conveyed no relevance
Together as one.
Options considered
in ideation gathered
decisions defined.
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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There are some intriguing verses there Michael, I like them all.
Strangely whether it is haiku, senryu or not is strangely one of the things that I bother about so here goes
1 - haiku
2 - neither
3 - senryu
4 - senryu
5 - is a 5,8,5
to get over this problem where a 5,7,5 is neither I have used the term goldiku.
No I'm not really bothered but I do like goldiku best .
Fine Haikus or Senryus or Wotsits M. I'm busy fussing about metres and syllables!
I dunno if I'm on foot or horse-back. Or is it: Horse or foot-back?
I think it's fundament or the back part of the human foot below the ankle.
without doubt, you have displayed a fine collection here.. a few purists might argue, but hey, what the hell...
I guess purists could only argue if I was to label them individually but as you say - hey, what the hell - thanks N
my pleasure sir
FI ! UNCLE MICHAEL ~ I had you clssified as Betjemannesque Purist. I teach Seniors "The Art of Poetry" and the diference betweem H (Nature) & S (Human Nature & Inanimate) ! Also I insist (in the classroom !) on 3 lines & 575 syllables. No. 4 is (6 7 5) and No. 5 (5 8 5) what in liverpool we called ZUMOSENRYU. If you were in my Class ~ I would mark you 8 / 10 ~ OK. My fave is No. 1 which is the only HAIKU ~ the rest (in my book) are SENRYU ! I have posted a Philosophical Senryu (A Confusryu) today please check ! Love the PINGUS ~ I print & blow them up for my niece (4) who is a Penguinophile ! CARTOONS ~ sans mots ~ are very good for kids to strech their imagination. Love through Poetry ~ BRIAN & ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
I was aware they don't all follow the generally held definition of 575 but I did say 'who cares' - if I was in a classroom I wouldn't submit them although of course the definition of morae itself is open to interpretation. So pleased you like Penguin family - they have been used in paintings and cards in the past.
That's a lot of …..roo's (….ryu's) and ….iku's. Are there any around this evening?
No I'm a square this evening. And you?
Michael,
I enjoyed your super ...iku’s and ...ryu’s(as Orchi labels them).
Of course, you know how much I love your Penguin series! Great whimsical art!
~Laura~
Thanks Laura so pleased you like my scribbles and etchings
Your words in these haikus/senryus have a tremendous impact on the reader. I also love your accompanying artwork as it speaks to your wonderful talent. Great job, Michael.
Wishing you and your family a very Merry Christmas.
You are too kind Tamara - and my best wishes to you and yours.
And to you, as well Edward.
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