I thought maybe you could recognise me
If I showed you all my pieces
The broken and the beautiful
The sharp edges and depleted
I thought maybe you would know my face
If I swept back my autumnal wave of hair
So you could look straight into my emerald eyes
And tell me what was there
I thought maybe you would sense my soul
If I laid it bare in every line I breathed
That maybe you would breathe me in
And chase me through a dream
Alone
'I think therefore I am'
Some philosopher once said
I think of all I could have been
But just had thoughts instead
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How much should we reveal of ourselves when we relax into loving. Such a safe secure warm feeling where we let all that we are flow hoping our partner is on the same planet.
Sadly all too often we are eclipsed.
Yes I believe I could be eclipsed...
Such a poignant appeal in this outpour of Being - a most heart-wrenching read dear Sylvia
Thanks Fay.
Was just having a hopeless romantic moment...
No need for me to search high and low today, these words jumped out at me as soon as I opened the page... and they are beautiful words indeed, crafted into a meaningful poem but maybe tinged with a certain sadness... Neville
My being is forever tinged with a certain sadness.
Thanks for catching my words when the jumped out at you x
I'm glad I caught them too...
A beautiful write.
Thanks Michael 😌
Exquisite my friend
Channeling Plath in this
very symmetrical from the depths. 👍🏼💫
Plath was often misunderstood you know. She was both enigmatic yet awkward.
As you know she channels me!
And I bet noone ever understood her sense of humour either 🙄
Thanks for reading and being kind.
“I thought maybe you would sense my soul
If I laid it bare in every line I breathed
That maybe you would breathe me in
And chase me through a dream”
Perfectly written.
Thanks kindred vibe 🤗
Strongly written emotive write, you still have time to be what you want to be.
Indeed I do 🌈
Beautiful poem. Very well put together and flows perfectly. I often find myself in solitude and wanting of someone to understand. I don't open up easily.
Well thanks for sharing my moment 😌
Lovely piece. I sense that you are seeking acceptance/understanding from someone or something. But the reality is that you are alone.
Maybe we are all alone but I am more conscious of my solitude.
There is a bit of reaching, seeking, imagining. But then dreams are su much better than reality.
Thanks for reading and commenting 😌
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