Neville

What We Got

What We Got

 

I have my routines

You have your rituals

 

I have my have beens

You have your yet to comes

 

I have my swear words

You have your idioms

 

I have my needs

You have your addictions

 

I have my oath and creed

You have your religion

 

I have my manuscript

You have your poetry

 

I have my pride

You have your jealousy

 

I have my wife and kids

You have your fantasies

 

I have my firm beliefs

You have your misconceptions

 

I have my memories

You have your delusions

 

I have my scars

You display self inflicted wounds

 

When I have nothing left to lose

Will you still want me

 

 

 

Comments10

  • Michael Edwards

    I look at things from both sides now - great concept well expressed and great result.

    • Neville

      Funny innit... I suspect our respective review comments must have crossed in the ether... cheers Michael, tis appreciated....... N

    • Goldfinch60

      If we all saw things in the same way it would be a very boring world.

      • Neville

        it would indeed be uniform & where's the beauty in that... unless its a French Maids uniform or summat similar maybe.... Cheers N

      • orchidee

        A fine write Neville. OK - I'll still want ya. I won't leave ya. I'll stay and sing to ya, mind ya. Would ya rather I left?!

        • Neville

          thank you orchidee... no, I would rather you write...

          • orchidee

            I ain't done 700 hymn-poems though, mind ya. Some are 'said' writes with no tune!

          • 3 more comments

          • Laura🌻

            Neville,

            Look at both sides of the coin and then flip it!
            After all is said and done,
            you “have nothing left to lose” and she “will still want” to hold on to you...
            just like holding on to a treasured and rare gold coin!

            A fine write which I enjoyed reading!
            Thank you for sharing your poetic pen!

            Have a wonderful Sunday!

            ~Laura~

            • Neville

              Thank you so much for your luverly comment my friend... a much appreciated visit if ever there was

              Neville

            • Andrew Charles Forrest

              Well Neville great wrte made me think of Joni Mitchells song Clouds Very reflective and hard hittings but different times.. Well done you

              • Neville

                Thank you sir... you just made my day..... Neville

              • Mottakeenur Rehman

                Superb...heart touching!

                • Neville

                  How very kind, thank you... Neville

                  • Mottakeenur Rehman

                    💖🖋🙏👌☺

                  • Candlewitch

                    hello Neville,

                    beauty in truth...my favorite!!! such wisdom!!!

                    *hugs, Cat

                    • Neville

                      Hello Cat.. many thank you's & All Good Things ... Neville

                    • dusk arising

                      As the psychiatrist told me 'speaking to your second personality, i'd get out now whilst you still can'.
                      I asked him for a second opinion.

                      • Neville

                        I second that.. cheers

                      • sylviasearcher

                        Thought provoking.

                        At first I read this like a person comparing himself to another, differing perspectives that cannot be reconciled. Though the I seemed supreme. The I seemed worthy. The I had something to lose.

                        Then I read it like a conversation between self and societal norms and judgements. How society tries to bend people to fit preconceived ideas and notions, until individuation is gone and then there is nothing left of the self.

                        Then of course I thought of two inner voice fighting amongst themselves.

                        Thought-provoking.

                        • Neville

                          cheers my friend... much appreciated and true.......

                        • Suresh

                          I am me, you are what I want to be

                          Have often thought on these lines, that you have expressed so well

                          • Neville

                            You are so very kind.. sometimes, far too good for words... but always welcome and appreciated... Neville



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