What We Got
I have my routines
You have your rituals
I have my have beens
You have your yet to comes
I have my swear words
You have your idioms
I have my needs
You have your addictions
I have my oath and creed
You have your religion
I have my manuscript
You have your poetry
I have my pride
You have your jealousy
I have my wife and kids
You have your fantasies
I have my firm beliefs
You have your misconceptions
I have my memories
You have your delusions
I have my scars
You display self inflicted wounds
When I have nothing left to lose
Will you still want me
Comments9
I look at things from both sides now - great concept well expressed and great result.
Funny innit... I suspect our respective review comments must have crossed in the ether... cheers Michael, tis appreciated....... N
If we all saw things in the same way it would be a very boring world.
it would indeed be uniform & where's the beauty in that... unless its a French Maids uniform or summat similar maybe.... Cheers N
A fine write Neville. OK - I'll still want ya. I won't leave ya. I'll stay and sing to ya, mind ya. Would ya rather I left?!
thank you orchidee... no, I would rather you write...
I ain't done 700 hymn-poems though, mind ya. Some are 'said' writes with no tune!
have ya done any hearse one's.......
Erm, done some on short funereal prayer themes, though me singing them drove folk to early graves! Understandable, eh? lol.
hymns & hearse poems should go down a treat with most folk, I would think.... N
Neville,
Look at both sides of the coin and then flip it!
After all is said and done,
you “have nothing left to lose” and she “will still want” to hold on to you...
just like holding on to a treasured and rare gold coin!
A fine write which I enjoyed reading!
Thank you for sharing your poetic pen!
Have a wonderful Sunday!
~Laura~
Thank you so much for your luverly comment my friend... a much appreciated visit if ever there was
Neville
Well Neville great wrte made me think of Joni Mitchells song Clouds Very reflective and hard hittings but different times.. Well done you
Thank you sir... you just made my day..... Neville
Superb...heart touching!
How very kind, thank you... Neville
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As the psychiatrist told me 'speaking to your second personality, i'd get out now whilst you still can'.
I asked him for a second opinion.
I second that.. cheers
Thought provoking.
At first I read this like a person comparing himself to another, differing perspectives that cannot be reconciled. Though the I seemed supreme. The I seemed worthy. The I had something to lose.
Then I read it like a conversation between self and societal norms and judgements. How society tries to bend people to fit preconceived ideas and notions, until individuation is gone and then there is nothing left of the self.
Then of course I thought of two inner voice fighting amongst themselves.
Thought-provoking.
cheers my friend... much appreciated and true.......
I am me, you are what I want to be
Have often thought on these lines, that you have expressed so well
You are so very kind.. sometimes, far too good for words... but always welcome and appreciated... Neville
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