Peace

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  Neville March 5th, 2019 07:01

  a splendid senryu.. nuff said.. N

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    sylviasearcherMarch 5th, 2019 09:08

    There is nothing else

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  Fay Slimm. March 5th, 2019 07:40

  Each line of agony pierces this reader - a senryu. to end all sens. Sylvia.

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    sylviasearcherMarch 5th, 2019 09:09

    Thanks Fay,
    Piercing agony describes it well.

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  Poetic Dan March 5th, 2019 08:43

  .... I hope peace came after letting go of this, if not keep writing we are listening. Till the end
  Much love and respect

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    sylviasearcherMarch 5th, 2019 09:05

    Thanks Dan,
    
    I’m struggling to be honest, so I tried to write it out like you said.
    
    It came out like this:
    
    Sabotage
    
    Silence sneaks around the cracks
    Of the machine gun
    Stuttering
    Hammering
    Sabotaging
    The fabric of my breath
    
    Blood oozes like an ocean
    In the dead spaces
    Drowning
    Numbing
    Darkens
    The rise and fall of my chest
    
    Is it black?
    Is it dead?
    Full up with empty
    Seeping sepsis
    Unsaid
    
    Reach for me
    I’ll make you regret it
    Yearn for me
    You’ll never forget it
    
    Lift me up
    So I can slump
    High with your praise
    So I can jump
    
    Two for joy flies from the treetops
    Into the relentless abyss
    Too much
    Too many
    Last one
    Moments
    Like this
    
    

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    Poetic DanMarch 5th, 2019 09:19

    Wow. That's beautifully sad, I've read it a few times now and "reach for me" resonates so much. I'm not what this is that has a grip on you but you've got this!
    Breathe and remember, you are a star with so much power...
    
    Ps
    Sometimes it helps to use mother nature

4 more comments

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  Michael Edwards March 5th, 2019 14:41

  Ouch - but a great senryu nonetheless.

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    sylviasearcherMarch 6th, 2019 02:43

    Thank you

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  Goldfinch60 March 6th, 2019 01:04

  Super though very sad senryu. May you troubles see the light and all is well.
  
  Let my eyes be clear,
  Let my throbbing heart be pure.
  Life is there for me.

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    sylviasearcherMarch 6th, 2019 02:44

    I guess some days the light evades