Victims of Truth
I am a victim of truth
You are a victim too
Therefore
We are both victims
Of honesty
I would but say this tho
If the swallow truly be
The dolphin of the skies
I would have you
Shade your eyes
Let me be your ocean
Then come drown in me
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Neville (
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An engagingly poetic invitation in this fascinating love poem which your pen easily disguises - - a warm tender first read of my day dear friend.
I am honoured and oh so bloomin true and then some dear Fay... Am off to take a stroll by the sea for real in a few moments.. West Bay is calling as it does increasingly these days.... N
An enjoyable read.
I love the last two lines, I feel like I should have written them, they are so full of painful romance.
those two ingredients often go hand in hand... thank you my friend..
Although it could also be read with a hint of cynicism to the tragic romantic. Like a satire. So I’m left uncertain.
I still like it because that is about where I am at with the idea of romance.
Aww bless ya sylviasearcher.. Romance aint all its cracked up to be.. in fact, I much prefer Florence & Zebedee and Naples and La Spezia and and ...
You see I don’t even know what you mean by all those references...
My sense of humour let me down again.. sorry..
Stop apologising, ‘‘twas my ignorance!
words eh....
A fine write N. I dunno if it's about romance, cos Fido never lets me get that far. He's holding me back. Woof! Quiet, Fido. lol.
Good old Fido... cheers orchidee... N
Neville,
I enjoyed reading your poem! Your penned words that can be interpreted in many ways...depending on the reader! I’d call it a smorgasbord of interpretations!
~Laura~
Hey Laura.. how cool is that.. this one helluva appreciative & would be poet reckons cool as perma frost, no less................. Neville
Cooeeee, Sir N. Should I put Fido out the back yard a while?
Why what are you planning..
Maybe something 'romantic' or 'exciting'! Ooohhh! And a blindfold for Fido.
And be my dolphin
in a sea of dreams.
- this drew me in and makes me want to write a take on some of the ideas you have used so well.
Be my guest sir.. thanks for the visit too.......... N
Okay - just a few lines
In a sea of dreams
be my dolphin
swim with me
like a swallow
and soar
in foaming cloud
and season
our lives
with the salt
of your spray
nice ......
Could be improved. Written quickly.
Nowt is ever perfect... revisit.. tinker and post... I think you have certainly got the makings...
I reckon we all get that feeling.. there is something about the lay of words and of course our imaginings.... and the ocean and the sky and of life and love and butterflies..... x
Yes we certainly do Nev -- I agree words being the gateway to fancy bring out latent dreams about oceans and skies and desire and butterflies - - - - - nite again - - from me x
Tis them desires we need to get our heads around... sometimes those butterflies just get in the way... nite nite again Fay x
I thought I knew how big the world was. Thank you for letting me know that I was getting ahead of myself.
Best regards.
Happy to have been of service my friend.. and thank you for noticing... N
Very good Neville, may you ocean be full of love.
Thank you GF60.. I hope it is too..........
Superb beyond measure Sir. 👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼💫💫
I am almost lost for words... many thank you's indeed are now winging their way to ya and true.... Neville
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