Promise me
When I lay myself
Naked and unmasked
That you will never
Diminish me
Nor in my frailty bask
With your penetrating eyes
Promise me
When the moment comes
And all has passed
That you will always
Cherish
The parts that were too vast
With your passion in your chest
And the vexation on your tongue
Promise me
When I fail at being good
You will see my endeavour
And lift me up
With love
Before I fall deep into never
Promise me
Forever
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Author:
sylviasearcher (
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- Comment from author about the poem: It is not a poem about religion, not any mass subscribed one anyway. Though I appreciate some may relate it to that and that’s not a problem for me. It is in fact written with a number of layers of interpretation. But I guess most of all it’s written with an ache for love. Not my ache of course, I’m not at all like that. Because it is just make believe of course, but something must have put the words there?
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Ah yes the hope that we shall be remembered with positive thoughts. So rare but such a genuine desire from a true lover.
To often here in MPS we see te exact opposite.
Lovely writing which conveyed thoughts i had not been able to put into words myself....
Thanks for you kind words in response to my offering today.
Kindness and love!
Just as Mr. Kipling is said to make exceedingly good cakes.. you have penned an exceedingly good poem here...... a most enjoyable read and true.... Neville
Thanks Neville, have you been eating cake?
Cakes fulfil all the above promise so am more than happy to be compared to a baker 😊
I like his blackcurrant and apple pies.. or at least I used to like them.... I really did enjoy your poem my friend.... N
Wow. Took me to many places and at the end you made me shiver. Deep in thought now, than you kindly my dear
You are very welcome.
I hope it was a good shiver!
Even the cynic in me can’t help gushing a little love some days!
Dusk is right - so uplifting and brings hope and promise in contrast to much posted work. Fine as ever Fay.
I am of course over the moon that you mistook me for fay!
Must have been too uplifting for me!
😊⭐️😊🌈
Oh bloomin' 'eck, mea culpa - but don't let the error detract from my comments which were certainly intended for you dear F... err...I mean .... Sylvia. lol🤔😊
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An ache for love could not have been written better dear Sylvia.
Very good positive write, we all fail sometimes but having the strength to find the will to carry on is vital or a fulfilling way ahead
Or having the ability to forgive and hope?
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