SWEETNESS.

Fay Slimm.

 

 

Sweetness.

 

I see
butterscotch evenings,
blue sky honied with amber-cream,
last light frothing waves
as sea's olive coverlet changes
to caramel-sepia.


I see
twilight blush streaking,
drab dusk striped in humbug-tints,
pink cheeks to match sun 
as sinking in cherry-lip memories
it paints clandestine scenes.


I see
Treacle-soft times sealing
fate's hue in sugared vows, trying
each offered treasure
of sun-down discovery, zealously 
sharing mutual feelings.


I see
Chocolate-smooth dreaming
invade ever-after, held closely
those covert secrets
best kept on beaches made tasty
by first love's extra sweetness.

 

 

 

 

  • Author: Fay Slimm. (Offline Offline)
  • Published: April 22nd, 2019 03:07
  • Category: Unclassified
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  • dusk arising

    Your eye sees more than the casual viewer methinks.

    The candied excitement, thrill and magic of love and romance beside the oceans edge radiate through your words today.

    • Fay Slimm.

      You think aright my friend - -- thanks for your perceptive comment D.A,

    • Michael Edwards

      Super write Fay. I see expanding waistlines.

      • Fay Slimm.

        Ha ha - - well not my waistline to maybe the other one............... thanks Mike for your fun-comment.

      • Neville

        sinfully sweet & then some...

        • Fay Slimm.

          Covertly so Nev. and thank you............... x

          • Neville

            ..................... x

          • orchidee

            Good write Fay. I'm gonna eat all that tasty stuff!

            • Fay Slimm.

              Good for you Orchi.

            • ANGELA & BRIAN

              THANKS FOR SHARING THIS FAY ! Even @ 31 & 36 we can relate to this as we are still in the First Flush of True Love. In these last few precious days every scent & every savour of each other is butterscotch - caramel - mint - cherry lips - treacle - chocolate - by the end of this trip we will have eaten each other. We have NEVER EVER felt like this about anyone else before : IT MUST BE LOVE ! We know you will understand FAY because you write from experience : AMEN. In S Island BRIAN assures me there will be many many secret & precious places for us to share our LOVE and we are still discovering each other : AMEN Love the PICTURE FAY : That really is US : AMEN
              Blessings & Joy & Peace
              Love in the Spirit ANGELA & BRIAN 🧡🧡🧡🧡

              • Fay Slimm.

                So pleased you could relate to the sweetness and words dear duo -- may tomorrow bring you all you have so looked forward to on the tour of South Island..... x x

              • Suresh

                Me think ANGELA & BRIAN are living your poem.

                Lovely write

                • Fay Slimm.

                  Ha ha - - well it appears so Suresh - they are over the moon to be together at this present moment................ thanks so much for your visit and comment.

                • SerenWise

                  Beautiful use of language and metaphor, nicely done

                  • Fay Slimm.

                    Thanks a load Seren - - so pleased you enjoyed the read.

                  • Mundo

                    Nice sweet created pen. Thank you for sharing.

                    • Fay Slimm.

                      Thank you too Mundo for you visit to read and to comment - so pleased you enjoyed the piece called Sweetness.

                    • Goldfinch60

                      I see all those goodies, both treats and words that go together so well Fay.

                      • Fay Slimm.

                        Ah - glad you enjoyed the imagery here Goldy - - thank you too for your very kind comment.



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