Spin-Back.
Numbed by first trickle of unbelief's fear
She knelt as that flow of pooling dark red
Discoloured grass, small circles like treacle
Were slowly congealing about his still head.
Silenced by shock she focused glazed eyes
A once sporty car lay pieced on hard ground
Spilling destruction while her disturbed sight
Became fixed on one wheel still turning round.
Stunned by confusion a sudden spin-back
Revived her to hearing the moments before.
The tree halting speed with one piercing crash,
She knew his young heart was beating no more.
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
Offline) - Published: May 6th, 2019 04:18
- Comment from author about the poem: Written after reading a recent newspaper report.
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so very sad.. but I imagine this is precisely how it happens and all too often..... a tragic moment captured so well...... Neville
My thanks Nev for your comment on what has become a familiar occurrence on our roads and byways - -- hoping readers will relate to the need for control as many young drivers meet a sad end through thoughtless speed.
It must have been a fast end from the violence of the car splitting in half.... something in me thinks that they were having a very exhilarating "rush" of excitement driving that fast......... and then nothing..... so as long as they didn't kill anyone else, they went to Valhalla having some fun. We're all here for such a short time - life is pretty meaningless really and death is a friend. You certainly caught the shock of the survivor.
Yes the outcome of tragedy like this often shocks survivors for the rest of their lives - thanks Lorna for your perceptive comment.
So sad, so poignant - a tragic read so well expressed.
This kind of tragedy happens all too often - -thanks for your comment dear Michael.
A tragic situation written with so much meaning, and well expressed.
My gratitude for your visit and comment on this growing problem dear poet-friend.
A thoughtful write Fay.
Thank you dear Orchi.
A moment of thrill, left blood spilled, that your poetic words displayed for us to see.
Yes any survivor of a tragic car crash has to live with after-effects for many a decade. Thanks for your comment dear Suresh.
Taking speed from the car puts life into its inhabitants. When will people realize that there are safe speeds and reckless speeds?
Thanks Fay for bringing this tragic event to poetic fruition. I think your poem may serve to highlight the world-wide problem of auto safety.
- Phil A.
Very true that when speed becomes reckless all sorts of horrors can take control - - thanks for your visit and views on this growing problem dear Phil.
Tragedy Fay Phrased in a poignant way Lost my Sister in a car crash So I can relate to your sentiments. These poems are neccessary if they can even pull one person up short. Bless you my friend.
So sorry to hear of your loss of a sister in such a crash as the poem describes - - condolences my poem- friend -- - - grief after a tragic happening like this lasts for a lifetime. Thank you for your read and for the comment.
Such a tragic accident but becoming all too common these days when speed is the way people deem necessary.
I agree my friend - -- shank's pony is a term rarely used yet walking is the healthier thing to do ..... thank you for your read and comment dear Goldy.
🙁 great writing
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