dusk arising

dear J

 

 

and so it is goodbye
i shan't be home again
you know why
and our differences now
just break my heart

go on and go free
the world loves you
darling woman
we are not happy
but happiness is out there

for us both

Comments8

  • Goldfinch60

    Strong emotive write d a.

    • dusk arising

      Thanks.... to be clean cut and decent was my motive.

      • Goldfinch60

        A very fine motive d a.

      • Michael Edwards

        A profound write - love it.

        • dusk arising

          If it's painful, cut it off, for everyones sake. Thanks ME.

        • Suresh

          If part we must, why can't it be like this...
          My sentiments as well

          • dusk arising

            Exactly, all to often people take ending to a level far below that which is decent. Thanks for commenting.

          • Cynthia

            put me in the feels, great work.

            • dusk arising

              Which means you are a 'feelings' poet. Good to know you and thank you for commenting.

            • moordykspot2

              Ending relationship Always painful. Well phrased with hope as conclusion
              Thankyou

              • dusk arising

                There is always a way to make a positive from an apparent negative. Thank you for your comments here.

              • Poetic Dan

                Your craftsmanship is masterful sir
                Thank you

              • Poetic Dan

                Also if that was about Mary J I'm taking good care of her 😉

                • dusk arising

                  Famously a goodbye its over letter is known as a 'Dear John' letter.... well seeing as i don't have touchy feely relationships with blokes... i modified this to Dear J.....

                  • dusk arising

                    Famously a goodbye its over letter is known as a 'Dear John' letter.... well seeing as i don't have touchy feely relationships with blokes... i modified this to Dear J.....

                  • 1 more comment

                  • Neville

                    If I was able, I would award these few words top marks, so powerful and generous are they ... Neville

                    • dusk arising

                      Thanks Neville, it's just an attempt to contrast the horrible endings we can all see written about on MPS so regularly. Relationships are of course a about two peoples lives and when it no longer works, for whatever reason, there really is no point in not wishing them every happiness in their future.

                      • Neville

                        I agree entirely..... Neville



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