tree uprooted

dusk arising


On a long road travelled
another stone rolled
a tree uprooted
spirit without soul
distilled and separate
though not refined
rawness aches
unsettled mind


  • Poetic Dan

    So many thoughts spiral out of this.
    Superb, sir!

    • dusk arising

      It's just how i was feeling one night. Glad to get you thinking LOL good one Dan thank you.

    • SoulMeetsBody

      Some simple yet effective images and metaphors. Many interpretations spring to mind. Great job!

      • dusk arising

        Thanks for stopping by and commenting, always appreciated.

      • Neville

        it would take a very long time to get bored with these words, if at all ever... N

        • dusk arising

          Hey Neville thats good news, I can do the boring bit all too easily.

          • Neville

            my pleasure as always..

          • Andrew Charles Forrest

            Speaks to me of life age and how thing unravel in the end
            Awesome write DA Love it

            • dusk arising

              Yes, life is a funny old game isn't.... this is just how i was feeling one night recently though. Thanks for your kind comments sir!.

            • Fay Slimm.

              Words filled with chances to read, feel and empathize with life on a raw, aching road and the feel of sheer aloneness -- - a sensitive write that stays in the mind and heart.

              • dusk arising

                You are right, it does say a lot and is very sensitive. It's how i was feeling at the time, reflective and a little mystified. Always like to read your comments, thank you.

              • Suresh

                All those collections we have stored, still searching for the lost soul.
                Profoundly penned.

                • dusk arising

                  Thank you Suresh, yep my soul lurks around here some place.

                • Michael Edwards

                  I love enigmatic -great write

                  • dusk arising

                    OK i shall pen you some real ropey enigmatic stuff then. Thanks ME

                    • Michael Edwards

                      Keep them short and punchy - don't string them out.


                    • Goldfinch60

                      Life can have all these problems thrown at you but they can be overcome when the mind eventually settles.

                      • dusk arising

                        And you Goldfinch are a shining example of your own words as being true as you say.

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