On a long road travelled
another stone rolled
a tree uprooted
spirit without soul
distilled and separate
though not refined
rawness aches
unsettled mind
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dusk arising (
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So many thoughts spiral out of this.
Superb, sir!
It's just how i was feeling one night. Glad to get you thinking LOL good one Dan thank you.
Some simple yet effective images and metaphors. Many interpretations spring to mind. Great job!
Thanks for stopping by and commenting, always appreciated.
it would take a very long time to get bored with these words, if at all ever... N
Hey Neville thats good news, I can do the boring bit all too easily.
my pleasure as always..
Speaks to me of life age and how thing unravel in the end
Awesome write DA Love it
Yes, life is a funny old game isn't.... this is just how i was feeling one night recently though. Thanks for your kind comments sir!.
Words filled with chances to read, feel and empathize with life on a raw, aching road and the feel of sheer aloneness -- - a sensitive write that stays in the mind and heart.
You are right, it does say a lot and is very sensitive. It's how i was feeling at the time, reflective and a little mystified. Always like to read your comments, thank you.
All those collections we have stored, still searching for the lost soul.
Profoundly penned.
Thank you Suresh, yep my soul lurks around here some place.
I love enigmatic -great write
OK i shall pen you some real ropey enigmatic stuff then. Thanks ME
Keep them short and punchy - don't string them out.
😉
Life can have all these problems thrown at you but they can be overcome when the mind eventually settles.
And you Goldfinch are a shining example of your own words as being true as you say.
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