Lorna

The Carousel Ride



And so they put us on the carousel

How cute we are

How adorable

As our little legs run haltingly

Towards the future

Round and round

And some of it is wonderful

Then the gears seem to stick

The protective cover erodes

The rain falls through

The seats rust

Our friends fall off

And there are tears in the horses' eyes

Comments12

  • orchidee

    A good write Lorna.

  • dusk arising

    This is about real horses and neglect. Sad sad subject. Greyhounds too.
    Make readers think between the lines.

    • Lorna

      No it isn't........... it's about life not horses.......

      • dusk arising

        ooppss i got it wrong again, so i shall re-read. Apologies.

      • Suresh

        Yes, life is a carousel

        Really enjoyed reading this poem.

      • Fay Slimm.

        Life's endless roundelay of trying not to fall and make mistakes your clever pen relates with good imagery which leaves a sound message to ponder - - a fine write again Lorna.

      • DesertWords

        Round and round. The circle of life carries us until the music stops. Thanks for the thoughtful reflection.

      • Michael Edwards

        So well penned - a great read.

      • Goldfinch60

        Those tears are getting evermore prevalent in the world we are going round and round in.

      • FineB

        Hello Lorna,

        An enchanting and great write.

        I love carousels. Everytime I see one I have to have a ride on one. Childhood nostalgia I dont care how old I am.

        Keep writing FineB

        • Lorna

          I haven't seen one in ages! Next time I do, I'll be on it!

        • Andrew Charles Forrest

          Great metaphor for life Lorna and I think of how we all spruce ourselves up for the new year/season only to fade and tire each winter
          Every year gets tougher
          Great write I liked this

        • Maxine Smith

          This is a great, well written poem, I like it, round and round we go.

        • Crystal Hope

          oh wow! an outstanding write.

        • 🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷😸

          A great metaphorical poem, so sublime a comparison of life to a carousel and horses. Kudos.

          Would you pls pleez give your thoughts/ comments on my newest poem too?



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