Captivating Games
I
Want
To be the kite
At the end of your string
I
Want
To feel like a hawk
Making love on the wing
I
Want
To be that colour
Over there without a name
I
Want
To be a player
Without playing silly games
I
Want
To be your prisoner
With shackles and no shame
Not too much to ask for surely
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Author:
Neville (
Offline) - Published: June 30th, 2019 03:27
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Ask for shackles and you will be caught in the love-game with verses like this one my tender friend - - an alluring read and I want to say how much I enjoyed the way you you want to play games that captivate this reader - - - - another thoroughly engaging write. ..................... Fay
Thank you Fay & muchly meant....... Have a great Sunday.... Neville
Thank you I will - - am going to Stithians Lake higher in the hills but only about 10 mins by car from where I live - so calming and plenty of runs for Tessa - - - hope your day too goes well Nev...........
Enjoy.... so far so good have just had lunch at my sons restaurant..
Great concept Neville
Thank you Andrew.... and please do forgive me, the Peter reference only just became clear a moment ago.... All Good Things to you & yours.... Neville
A fine write Neville, though I might swoon with shackles! lol.
you would if I shackled ya and that's for certain....
There's lots of things I'd like to be but actually I aint disappointed with what I am - a smug git lol
Niceione Neville
self awareness can be a double edged sword.. sometimes... in the meantime though, I thank you for popping in...... Neville
I'm good at poppin' - must be the diet.
I visualize five spells separating two loves, and with each verse a spell dissipates.... And no, it's not too much to ask.
I am still figuring out the spells ....
let me know when they are cast...... & thank you for visualising ..... Neville
THANKS FOR SHARING NEVILLE : ANGELA here : Its 10:30 am (MON) in NZ first Clinic is 1 pm just catching up on MPS ! Love yout quintet of triplets each one a Captivating Love Match ! BRIAN and I are 11,500 miles apart so we often play Cyber Captivating Games !
1. Im the KITE @ the end of an 11,500 mile string !
2. Our LOGO is two doves kissing on the wing !
3. CYBER LOVE is like a Nameless colour
4. When BRIAN comesfor me (OCTOBER) we wont play Silly Games !
5. When we*re together again our shackles will be LOVE !
Loved your very elegant POEM
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Yours ANGELA & BRIAN 🧡🧡
Good evening and thank you for visiting these words... your analysis and encouraging comments are much appreciated.. Peace & All Good Things to the pair of you.....
Neville
Beautifully written, love the use of rhyme, especially the second stanza
Thank you again Seren, much appreciated..... N
Great write Neville, I have already been captured and been that wonderful way for 38 years.
How wonderful is that.... good to hear my friend but never had a single doubt...... Neville
This was playful. I liked it but I am trying to work out the function of the change of format in the middle...
I liked want having a line of his or her own
Good mane my friend and thank you, not only for the very welcome visit.. but also for noticing the formatting error.... I agree entirely,
want
should have a line of his or her own... now corrected.. I hope.
Neville
I had just wondered if the shift was purposeful
it was an inadvertent error and I am glad you drew my attention to it....
This is a great poem! I think most of us want these things.....a fun read!--C
thank you ever so muchly my friend.... N
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