Captivating Games
I
Want
To be the kite
At the end of your string
I
Want
To feel like a hawk
Making love on the wing
I
Want
To be that colour
Over there without a name
I
Want
To be a player
Without playing silly games
I
Want
To be your prisoner
With shackles and no shame
Not too much to ask for surely
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Author:
Neville (
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Ask for shackles and you will be caught in the love-game with verses like this one my tender friend - - an alluring read and I want to say how much I enjoyed the way you you want to play games that captivate this reader - - - - another thoroughly engaging write. ..................... Fay
Thank you Fay & muchly meant....... Have a great Sunday.... Neville
Thank you I will - - am going to Stithians Lake higher in the hills but only about 10 mins by car from where I live - so calming and plenty of runs for Tessa - - - hope your day too goes well Nev...........
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Great concept Neville
Thank you Andrew.... and please do forgive me, the Peter reference only just became clear a moment ago.... All Good Things to you & yours.... Neville
A fine write Neville, though I might swoon with shackles! lol.
you would if I shackled ya and that's for certain....
There's lots of things I'd like to be but actually I aint disappointed with what I am - a smug git lol
Niceione Neville
self awareness can be a double edged sword.. sometimes... in the meantime though, I thank you for popping in...... Neville
I'm good at poppin' - must be the diet.
I visualize five spells separating two loves, and with each verse a spell dissipates.... And no, it's not too much to ask.
I am still figuring out the spells ....
let me know when they are cast...... & thank you for visualising ..... Neville
THANKS FOR SHARING NEVILLE : ANGELA here : Its 10:30 am (MON) in NZ first Clinic is 1 pm just catching up on MPS ! Love yout quintet of triplets each one a Captivating Love Match ! BRIAN and I are 11,500 miles apart so we often play Cyber Captivating Games !
1. Im the KITE @ the end of an 11,500 mile string !
2. Our LOGO is two doves kissing on the wing !
3. CYBER LOVE is like a Nameless colour
4. When BRIAN comesfor me (OCTOBER) we wont play Silly Games !
5. When we*re together again our shackles will be LOVE !
Loved your very elegant POEM
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Yours ANGELA & BRIAN 🧡🧡
Good evening and thank you for visiting these words... your analysis and encouraging comments are much appreciated.. Peace & All Good Things to the pair of you.....
Neville
Beautifully written, love the use of rhyme, especially the second stanza
Thank you again Seren, much appreciated..... N
Great write Neville, I have already been captured and been that wonderful way for 38 years.
How wonderful is that.... good to hear my friend but never had a single doubt...... Neville
This was playful. I liked it but I am trying to work out the function of the change of format in the middle...
I liked want having a line of his or her own
Good mane my friend and thank you, not only for the very welcome visit.. but also for noticing the formatting error.... I agree entirely,
want
should have a line of his or her own... now corrected.. I hope.
Neville
I had just wondered if the shift was purposeful
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This is a great poem! I think most of us want these things.....a fun read!--C
thank you ever so muchly my friend.... N
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