Change.
Growls Dark
when pale glow approaches young dawn
who yawning
bows to Heaven's law and edging forward
woken light
climbs down the morning's cold slide.
Light parts
misty fingers that dart first beam-spread
and widen
to shards which shatter ebony's battle
then displays
victor's scars to virginal day.
Day starts
when night bends to release last force
and weakly
as sated jaws close to more challenge black
cloud bellows
and sinks as it bursts, effort spent.
Night barks
his goodbyes then complaining no more
skulks away
so ruthless Old Sol can lead royal reign
and arrive
in state as change paints new on sky.
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
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Beautiful write Fay invoking the glories of each day
There is no end to the inspiration of sunrise and sunset for poets like me - thank you dear Michael for your kind comment.
Good write Fay.
My sincere thanks dear Orchi. for your visit your read and your comment.
a beautiful write indeed a veritable kaleidoscope & colour wheel combined......................... Neville
You are always so kind in your welcome comments dear Nev - lots of meant thanks.......... Fay.
A superb write to dispel night and welcome light.
Am delighted that you enjoyed the read Suresh - - there is so much to inspire in sunrise and sunset changes which poets' imagination can weave into poetry., Thanks indeed for your lovely comment.
GOOD EVENING FAY : ANGELA here : its 10:30 pm Tuesday : I have an evening Clinic so my first Clinic today is 2pm. There are lots of poems on MPS today and Brian suggested I should comment on this one ! For me a FAY POEM is always a delight and a Challenge. We have talked about Dawn & Surises but this one is special ! Four Blank Verse Sextets with perfect meter repeated in each one ! I love the language of poetic analysis : sounds very Scientific like a Exercise Program !
I like the linguistic structure of the Poem and the way in which the LIGHT *CHALLENGES* the DARK as each new DAY DAWNS ! It is the delicate way in which you use metaphor & similie which makes all you POEMS so so linguistically elegant !
V 1. DARK does not like DAWN but is powerless to prevent Her edging forward !
V 2. LIGHT shatters the DARK(ebony) but not without scars !
V 3. DAY starts and NIGHT makes one last effort to thwart Her !
But the effort is too much & NIGHT bursts & sinks !
V 4. DARK (NIGHT) barks his goodbyes and skulks away !
The ruthless LIGHT (SOL !) prevails and paints a New Day !
I havn*t run this analysis past BRIAN : I hope it does
your Perfect Poem justice. When I get back to Essex
I am going to help BRIAN with his Poetry Classes for Seniors !
Blessings & Peace & Love
Your Friend ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
Your comments are always so supportive and encouraging dear friend and thank you many times for this review of my offering on the daily "fight" between light and dark --- just my vivid imagination at work again but so pleased you enjoyed the read.
oh Fay---WoW!! Such descriptive language invokes the beauty of every day. Thank you for sharing!
Each day is so special.
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