the love of birdsong

dusk arising



When a bird sings to you...
                   you hear a thing of beauty

When your lover loves you...
                   you know a thing of beauty

Love and lovers may go awry...
                   leaving hearts and minds to flounder.

But when a bird again sings to you...  
                    listen ye not for bum notes.

  • Author: dusk arising (Offline Offline)
  • Published: August 1st, 2019 01:23
  • Comment from author about the poem: \\\\r\\\\nInspired by the poem published yesterday by Fay Slimm.
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Comments9

  • orchidee

    Ye have done a fine write dusk. Aww, some people are horrid. They say 'If birdsong wakes me up one more morning, I'll shoot those pesky birds!' Well, they don't say 'pesky' but you get the gist.

  • Neville

    I was not expecting that at all, I dunno what I was expecting

    not sure I was expecting anything in particular

    But bum notes made me smile bigger than a lot of other things might have done...

    Tis good to wake up with a smile on ya face.. thanks DA.... N

    • dusk arising

      Thanks Neville. Glad u got that funny side to this.

      • Neville

        my pleasure my friend....

      • Fay Slimm.

        Proud that my yesterday effort inspired this outburst of well-written lines D.A. - lovers indeed can end their song of beauty but a song-bird never forgets.

        • dusk arising

          Reflecting upon how loves gone wrong can 'taint' some and picking up the jist of your write, I thought a comparison of a loves approach and birdsong were apt. So many are afraid to dip that toe in deep and appear to be watching out for 'bum notes'. Or as Joni Mitchell asked "Why do you dream flat tyres".

        • Michael Edwards

          Love the write and that last line is to break wind for.

          • dusk arising

            Was especially written so that us old farts could attune.

          • ANGELA & BRIAN

            Thanks for sharing DA ! Before the time of H. Sapiens ~ Before a Human note was sung or Man or Woman crafted a Musical Instrument ~ the Birds Sang ! And before that the Wind sang in the Trees and the waves sang as they crashed & splashed on the shore.
            All Human Music is derived from the *Sounds of Nature* ! Today we drown out Natures Harmony & Melody and delude ourselves that we invented Music and that before Mozart there was just discord & cachophony ! What fools we are !
            If only we would take time to stroll in the Woods (without our headphones) and just listen ! We would then realise ~ MUSICWISE ~ WE are really only mimicing ~ Natures Notes after Her ~ AMEN !

            Harmony & Melody ~ to You & Yours
            Yours ANGELA & BRIAN 🧡💙🧡💙

            • dusk arising

              Totally agree but don't forget that rock n roll was supposed to be the sound of the city. But in the 90's i began to hear of music types such as 'industrial' and 'grunge' which, though i have no idea what defines them, must relate to the noises/music of the modern world to younger ears.
              And so life goes on eh?

              • ANGELA & BRIAN

                Thanks DA but in essence ~ thats MUSAK & not MUSIC !
                Too ofen CACHOPHONY and not HARMONY !!

                Yours B & A 💙🧡💙

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              • baddaytobealive

                I love this one. It’s simple but effective. Thank you for sharing 😊

                • dusk arising

                  Thank you badday, I though of you and how you would relate this. Better days will come and i hope that for you, one day, the bird of love sings a tune of lasting beauty.

                  • baddaytobealive

                    Thank you for being so sweet. I hope so too. 🙂

                  • Suresh

                    bummer!!!!!!!

                    A million laughs

                    • dusk arising

                      Even songbirds get flatulence you know. Thanks for reading me and glad you enjoyed it.

                    • Christina8

                      That is so true....when a bird sings you just never expect a bum note do ya? Wonderful writing DA!!

                      • dusk arising

                        Was really all about love using the metaphor of birdsong. Those damaged for love should not look for bum notes next time lovebird sings to them.....

                        Thank you Christina8

                      • Goldfinch60

                        Those birds soings are all part of Nature's Symphony where there are never any bum notes.

                        Like jazz there is never a wrong note, as it is the note you felt you needed to play at that time.

                        • dusk arising

                          I think it was Thelonius Monk who said his best notes were bum notes or mistakes because in covering them he was forced to explore avenues he would have never pursued had he not made the mistake.... as a novice being brave enough to ad-lib solos within a group i know just what he meant and accepting that bum notes are out there for all of us to drop, it is encouraging for those daring to venture into ad-libs..... we should tolerate others bum notes too as they hone their skills and be entertained by their attempts to self rescue.

                          The poem was really about love using the metaphor of birdsong. So many look for negatives when love comes singing to our hearts again because of the hurt they carry.



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