the ashes smouldered
their melancholy
into her hair
outside the cabin
his dog pined
a final tear welled
as silent anguish
fell to deaf ears
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dusk arising (
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the ashes smouldered
their melancholy
into her hair
outside the cabin
his dog pined
a final tear welled
as silent anguish
fell to deaf ears
Offline)
Comments8
this is really both beautiful and sad.. if it were a fine wine it would have great depth and some very intriguing undertones... N
Oh this leaves me wanting more! In a few lines, you've hinted at such a story. The depth and feeling that's in those lines.... Tell us more please!
CLARA X
How sad out dogs miss us as much as our loved ones and probably more
True DA true
I can read so much into this - super write dusk.
Brilliant write.
Brilliant! I was just left empty
touching, a few words crafted a scene of great depth
So much said in so few emotive lines d a.
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