Double Jeopardy
When you finish beating me
Why not relax and
Allow me to take over
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Author:
Neville (
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- Comment from author about the poem: brevity with a kidney punch thrown in.... 7 5 7 senryu form
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Such truth in those words Neville.
Bless ya GF60 my friend...
What's going on there? Will I swoon? Probably?!
nah.. ya gonna be knocked out..
Erm, you obviously mean - beating you at chess, or some other game. I can't think what else it could mean! (heehee).
Oh what a great write - it had me smiling and yet there is an underlying here - not sure what it is but it's there.
cheers Michael..
An ouch of a Sen. my friend....... am feeling the force of your interpretive punch. Clever indeed is your play on words.................. Fay
Mighty big thanks our Fay...
My absolute pleasure our Nev........................
Oh wow. This says so much in such few words.... I read it as following a physical beating, that person will take over with an emotional beating against themselves... As if blaming themselves...
Thank you for sharing this one. Definitely stayed awhile to ponder.
CLARA X
I am delighted that you have paid these words a visit.. and there is much credit due to your powers of observation..
There, too, brings about the subject of not being able to punch and fight back. Uncertaintly is the fear in your poem here. Yes, most people would fight back after being degraded down on the floor, These inflictions of physical damage changes the outlook upon ones own life and the strength to control it through either the physical or the mental ability to control it. When blood is spilt then the suffering begins. For few such lines to read, yet they reveal a thousand words. Powerfully done, my friendd...
Bless you Kevin have a great Sunday my friend...
You, too, Neville...
Ha ha ha ha now this really made me laugh. So many people came to mind.
Thank you.
On re-reading decided this should be in my favourites.
Cheers DA.. yes, I know a few who might fit the bill.. in fact, I imagine most will know at least a couple.... and thanks, you honour me my friend..
I got me armour on, in case anyone takes a swing at me. Ya know - at church, as I said! (You'll know what I'm on about).
I remember..... just keep ducking and make like a draught excluder or summat...
It's vicious ya know - the W.I. and such places - scary!
Returned for a second helping of this punchy 7-5 -7 and still find it bloomin tres bon............................ x
Merci mon petit pois...
True indeed
thanks SerenWise..
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