Asking.
Then as the knots of love
were tightened,
earth underneath us and
above us the sky,
we lay down to prove, in
matured twilight,
coupling's ripened delight
you and I.
Then life bade us lose our
much loved tie
with you beneath earth and
me asking why.
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
Offline) - Published: October 3rd, 2019 02:32
- Comment from author about the poem: Sad has to fade for life to find happy again - wrote this a while back .
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Comments8
Beautifully written poem of 'love's story' in mature years and the inevitable toll of our humanity.
The 'Why' we all ask is perennial as the wind which blows, and the wind upon a tear stained bears no answer as solace instead begins to dull the pain and haunt the eyes.
Your comment is truly appreciated dear dusk - it is indeed a fate all lovers face and so far cannot get an answer to a grief-stricken Why........... thanking you humbly and true............. Fay
A fine write Fay.
Thank you Orchi my friend.
Those last two lines... Truly heartbreaking. This is a wonderful poem Fay. Sad but wonderful and beautifully expressed... A life together... Then lost. Yes, this is a lovely poem.
Humble thanks Clara for your visit and comment on the poem Asking - it can indeed be heartbreaking for lovers to have to part that way................ but so glad you liked the feel of the verse.
A great big sad little write if I might be so bold....
tis near a sorrow shared..... Neville
Gratitude for your thoughtful comment Nev and yes that type of sorrow is shared by many .......... and .if you saw that to which you could relate in the verse I send a sigh of sympathy for the shared sorrow........................... Fay
Beautifully sad write dear Fay - another real gem.
So grateful Michael for your stopping by and reading my piece called Asking - your comments are always so supportive.
Good Evening FAY - ANGELA HERE - Its 7am Friday - just checking MPS before getting ready for WORK ! First CLINIC 10am ! Love the pathos in Your Poem - The ECSTACY of Life & Love and then the AGONY of Life & Death ! It is a reality we WILL all face & many Members have faced ALREADY ! We grieve with YOU ! Brian & I - hope & pray to see our RUBY Wedding (2060 !) but at the least our SILVER (2045) BUT just in case - We will CHERISH each & every DAY we have together. Thanks for sharing - very challenging as we face our whole future TOGETHER - AMEN !
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Dear Angela - you chose to use the word Cherish as days of love surround life with happiness and I think that is exactly the right word - time and circumstance can take joy away when parted by such as the verse indicated - yet memories if mounted on being appreciative will always be there to sustain grief................. love is worth such commitment and wishing you love that lasts for Ruby and Diamond years - -and more.......................... hugs from Fay
This is an absolute gem, Fay!
Ah - - many big thank yous for this comment my friend.......................... Fay.
Beautiful poem. 'Why' the unanswerable question in our lives.
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