Fay Slimm.

Over ?

 

 

Over ?

 

Keening, she leaned.

Head on his chest.

For sure it is over.

No more dreaming.

 

Tears shed aplenty.

Naught to be said.

When love loses hold

trust sinks between.

 

Deceit confessed.

Why now feel thrown ?

Eye to eye ventured.

Appeal takes hold.

 

Lips lift and open

a whispered entreaty.

"We still can together

reinvent peace"

Comments12

  • Laura

    My Dear Fay,

    As to your comment,
    I can see why.

    That last stanza
    does it for me.
    Un cri de coeur!

    An awesome write!
    Loved it!❀️
    Into my favorites it goes.

    ~Laura~🌻

    • Fay Slimm.

      Many thanks Laura for your lovely comment and for adding this to your faves - so glad the read gave you a lift..................... Fay

      • Laura

        You’re welcome!

        Things are getting better.

        Thank you.😊

      • Saxon Crow

        A very hopeful and lovingly sad poem Fay. Thanks for sharing it

        • Fay Slimm.

          Pleased the saw the two sides to the poem and that you enjoyed it my friend.

        • dusk arising

          Yes, though the passion and 'adoration' has gone, it should never be forgotten that so much was 'right' between two people who, till it failed, shared so much of their very existence together. After all that, you have to be friends don't you.
          I met an ex 30 years after we had shared our lives. I wrote a poem about it entitled 'Joey'. It's published on MPS (13/7/19).
          After the solicitors had done their polarising work on my ex-wife and me, we still remain good friends (without regular contact) and i would hate it to be any other way to be honest.
          Your piece today enters a realm many lovers are unable to cope with. Maybe understanding your words will bring a new insight to them

          • Fay Slimm.

            Yes I too hope the read aids those who would like to find a way through a dark web my friend. - not easy but achievable - - thanks for sharing your own experience - remaining friends is the best way for any failed close relationship. Great to have your comment D.A.

          • ANGELA & BRIAN

            Ooooooo FAY ~ This Poem frightened us when we first read it ! True Love is both tough & fragile at times so we can never ever take it for granted. We both feel that because our LOVE stood the test of 15 months & 11,500 miles separation when Angela was in New Zealand it will last forever ~ AMEN ! One of our Friends whose marriage split up recently after 17 years said *You must enjoy the BEST but (sadly) expect the WORST.* Love the picture (it looks just like us ~ no grey hairs yet !) and the poem. The last verse says it all *We can still be together ~ reinvent Peace* In our experience Marriages which endure a *crisis* are often stronger as a result ~ AMEN ! We are House Hunting ~ Please check *Home Sweet Home* Thanks !

            Blessings & Peace & Joy
            Love Angela & Brian πŸ’›πŸ’›πŸ’›

            • Fay Slimm.

              A fine comment after reading the poem and thank you so much for the views you shared on how to keep reinventing love for each other - through thick and thin love finds a way........ bless you dear duo. for your honest reviews.............

            • Alan .S. Jeeves

              You have done it again Fay. This is a truly wonderful piece.
              There are those who say question marks (and exclamation marks) shouldn't be used in poetry. Thanks for proving them wrong.
              I'm sure the person in the image is me when I was younger (the taller one).
              Once again I'm proud to ask if I may snap your fine write up for my Fayves.

              Ex animo, Alan

              • Fay Slimm.

                Ah - - your comment on "Over " shows it hit the mark Alan and am so pleased you found this one a place in your list of favourites......... glad too you saw yourself holding that gorgeous young lady in the black and white picture......... memories eh ?

              • orchidee

                A fine write Fay.

                • Fay Slimm.

                  Thank you my friend.

                • Maxine Smith

                  Oh wow Fay.

                  Just stunning.

                  • Fay Slimm.

                    So good that you saw the reason for my piece after seeing the black and white picture - - thanks a load for the visit and comment Maxine............... x

                  • Fay Slimm.

                    Grateful thanks to Poetic Dan and to meandmyself for adding the poem to their list of favourites - great that you both enjoyed the read.............. Fay

                  • Michael Edwards

                    Really invokes the senses - leaves me feeling sad yet full of hope.

                    • Fay Slimm.

                      Good that you felt the pull of senses after reading my few short lines - thanking you Michael for interpreting its message as you saw it.

                    • MendedFences27

                      Some who were lovers can split and be friends.
                      Others who were lovers will be enemies to the end.
                      I think it depends on how much of the trust is lost.
                      Fay - a very truthful and thought provoking poem. - Phil A.

                      • Fay Slimm.

                        I agree Phil - love gone sour takes a while to sweeten again and trust has to be rethought when things go wrong......... good that you saw truth in the reading my friend.

                      • Goldfinch60

                        What another wonderful write Fay. The sadness in your words is taken back in that last verse and the future is there for there love and peace to enjoy.

                        Andy

                        • Fay Slimm.

                          I am pleased that you felt the importance of the final stanza in Over dear Andy - -love if it is deep enough can stand any blows it gets from thoughtless actions........ thank you for your discerning comment.

                        • Neville

                          Its not over until the fat lady sings..... You have crafted a little belter here Fay.... dunno why I suddenly felt a pang of guilt...

                          Neville x

                          • Fay Slimm.

                            Good you think it a "belter" dear Nev, even if it did stir a wee pang of guilt.......- - that word took me back to my brother's lingo - long time ago though - -- still miss him so much............... thanking you kindly for this light-hearted comment which left me a smile................ x



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