I’VE NEVER SEEN
I wonder what mustard is keen about
and why’s there no rabbit in Sainsburys
I've never seen a shadow of doubt
and I don't know how fair fair is
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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Oh lol, good writes and pic M. You still trying to get out of that Fire Exit? It must be kept closed at all times. Doh!
Do not use in case of fire'
Do not use what?
where is the case?
Why would you want to use it?
Is there enough room in the case anyway?
By the time we've worked all that out, we shall have perished in the fire!
Will we or won't we - that's the burning question.
We'll be all in a heap; turned to ashes. I never knew it was so difficult to use a Fire Escape. Doh!
A Shopping Mall points out Fire Exits, but has cordoned off the escalators. Ordinary stairs or lift can be used, though they are 'round the other side' of the Mall. Not enough signage displayed. I saw one person at least walk away, thinking the upstairs was closed off. A Post Office and Supermarket are still open upstairs.
That kind of stuff is not easy to write... do you save up these gems ? Really impressive !
I keep an 'Ideas' folder in my documents and - yes - I stick ideas in it as they come to me. Every so often I invade it often marrying ideas, phrases lines etc together .Here's a few random lines currently sitting there which I will use sometime:
The only sounds
the distant noise of city life
a stranger here
Where no one fits the paradigm
A bud in a forest of trees
That slowly succumbs to
I kinda guessed you would. I think a lot of us do similar things. I have a folder full of ideas which didn\'t quite work and periodically i will sift through them and often knock one into shape or rob it of its vitals for another piece. Yesterdays piece came from an overheard \'across the room stood a piano waiting to be played\'. A great line on it\'s own.
I like your line
and as for the ones I quoted above I decided to play with them and came up with the following (which I'll hang on to until something inspires me to add to it):
a stranger here
Where no one fits the paradigm
The only sounds
the distant noise of city life
alone he stood
but just one bud
within an empty wood
A stranger
where none
fit the paradigm.
Alone.
Distant,
the noise
of city.
Life?
A single bud.
Within
an empty wood.
You're a kindred spirit - Love just playing with words.
When i was a young man i wanted to use clever words and today i do see some poets on here use clever words. By clever words i mean odd or seldom used words. I recall wanting to use the word betwixt LOL (I actually did use it recently). The problem with that is that they are also, by and large, clumsy words. They seldom fit the rhythm of a piece. When i see them i do tend to think 'this guy is trying to be clever rather than poetic'. Yes i definitely love playing with words and I believe it's one's aquired discipline which makes a piece or breaks it.
You marry ideas and thoughts so well Michael - - I too have great piles of notes and scribbled phrases in more than a few folders but am in awe of what your mind can put together my friend.
Then it's a case of mutual admiration dear Fay for I am also in awe of the way you weave the language.
Wise words Michael asking questions for which we may never know the answer. Why?
Andy
Love the artwork, think it is brilliant.
Andy
Thanks Andy - done in pencil - I set this as the weekly challenge for our local art group.
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