Louise was everso fussy about leaves,
for she liked them so fresh and quite juicy.
All the better to keep her nimble and slim
not too heavy like big sister Lucy.
She'd found new patch of fresh dandies
past the daffs and out under the hedge.
Down a concrete path that hurt her feet
thru a gate propped shut with a wedge.
Munch and crunch she'd chew all day
unaware of what else was around
when all of a sudden her ears went up
for she had heard a very strange sound.
Scramble and scrunch and snuffly sniff
sure enough somethings coming her way,
and - oh cor crikey - it came into view saying
"I am Roland the Hedgehog, good day!"
Oh my, oh my, what a very strange chap
not at all the sort of fellow she likes.
For, although he seemed very respectable,
he was covered all over in spikes!
"Good morning dear mr hedgehog"
said louise whilst sniffing a rose
she'd noticed Rolands cutest of eyes
and his wiggle-de-piggle-de nose.
"I don't suppose you have seen" he began
"a tortoise with a big yellow brolly
of dearie oh me, seems ive lost him you see,
we were chased that big next doors' collie".
Now Louise had been chased by that collie
but she could run just as fast as could be.
Just as well cos collie chased all that he saw
from his kennel below the oak tree.
With her wibbley nose, her bobbley tail
and ears so fine and so long,
Louise had captured poor Rolands heart
and he began to sing her this song.
" Oh Louise sweet bunny from under the hedge
with your whiskers so fine and so smart
would you dance with this spikey young hedgehog
for i'm afraid you've stolen my heart "
They danced on the lawn by the patio
to the coo of a blue turtle dove
and louise the rabbit was swept off her feet
having fallen so deeply in love.
The snails and the doormice applauded.
Four squirrels all danced in a ring.
The tortoishell cat threw up his top hat
and they all began to sing.
" hoo-rah, hoo-rah, for spike and miss bunny
for they dance together so well.
We do declare there is love in the air
and to where it shall lead who can tell "
The gerbil and the chihuahua
had prepared an impromptu meal,
there was lobster and flounder
and a beef quarter pounder
and of course a large jellied eel.
The drinks were provided by Muriel
and a cocker-poo spaniel called Tosh.
There was bubbly coke to tickle the throat
and plenty of cold orange squash.
As the shadows began to grow longer
the owl played a flute in the tree
and standing before sweet lulu his love
Roland hedgehog went down on one knee.
"I know that im not a rich hedgehog
and I dont have many comforts in life,
i'm asking you meekly, for I love you so deeply
Louise would you please be my wife"
The smile that then greeted young Roland
gave each of his spikes such a thrill.
There was no diguise, the love in her eyes
she said "yes my dear Roland I will"
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dusk arising (
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- Comment from author about the poem: For grandchildren of all ages.... please read to yours and let me know how they reacted.
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- Users favorite of this poem: Laura🌻, Poetic Dan.
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A lovely write dusk.
thanks orchidee
Roland works fast! lol
wonderfully rhythmic and enjoyed the small characterisation details, quirky and fun
'"Good morning dear mr hedgehog"
said louise whilst sniffing a rose
she'd noticed Rolands cutest of eyes
and his wiggle-de-piggle-de nose.'
Well things have to happen fast to keep kiddies interest or theyre gazing at the TV again. Was lots of fun writing this whilst I was in the right frame of mind. I'm pleased you liked it, thank you for commenting.
This is a most endearing tale DA and you really should try and get the whole thing published as a children's book ... I dont have any grandchildren as yet, but I do know that if I did, they would absolutely love this ....
Neville
Publishers are bombarded with keen writers work i think. My grand daughter was mildly amused when i read to her last week. Thanks for your encouraging comment sir.
dusk arising,
A captivating tale that will enchant any child...or adult (in my case😉). Neville has a great suggestion about having it published.
I enjoyed the read.
Thank you for sharing.
Laura🌻
Such fun to write this sort of thing. I think publishers are bombarded with kiddies book wannabe authors output. Kiddies are more interested in TV characters but i do think bedtime stories to be read at the bedside do have a particular niche.
Thank you for commenting and i'm pleased you enjoyed reading.
Well I'm 77 but I'm still a grandchild and I just love it - what an enchanting write - wish it was mine. More please Dusk.
It was such fun to find myself in the frame of mind to write this, hopefully I will be there again before too long and we'll find out what happens next. Pleased you enjoyed this.
Loud applause for this sweet love story - I have to confess it had me enthralled. Delighted to find a happy ending in this rhyme-for-all-ages dear friend.
There must be more to come. I'll find it one day i hope. Was lots of fun writing it and reading it to granddaughter the other day.
I shall need more time to practice your rhymes but when I get it right it will be a very nice flow... Blowing in the wind, maybe with the willow 😉
The owl and the pussy cat got washed up on a beach
where they met two dogs towing Dan
pussy was wary but the dogs weren\'t so scarey
and the owl had worked out a plan.
He realised just maybe, that Dan had a baby
which meant his home was quite near
and could be in the mood, to give them some food
and maybe a can of cold beer
But Dan is no fool, and playing it cool
deftly unpacked his camcorder
with a voice like a claxon shouted out \'action\'
which seemed to keep them in order
Dan\'s direction controlled all the action
and slowly developed the plot
but when baby starts crying, there is no denying
and everyone rushed to her cot
Absolutely brilliant... At 6.30am my friend
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