- What were the promises of his Vows?
His hardships across the distant miles
Was destiny sealing our fate ?
- What were the promises of his Vows?
The Heartbreaks which accumulate
Did his abiding love dissipate?
- What were the promises of his Vows?
His hardships across the distant miles
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Author:
Dove (Pseudonym) (
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Changed the words , so don’t know if it’s still a Triolet
I dunno if it's a Triolet either - well, it's not a Toilet! lol. A fine write RB.
Thanks Orchidee, the original was a triolet , but when I flushed away the forced rhymes , it became something better ,
Doesn't matter what it is - It's still a great write.
Thank you kindly Michael
HOLA ROMANTICA ~ Gracias por este Poema ~ Trioleta ! Thnaks for colour coding ~ Sad content. Brian & I were 11,500 miles apart for 15 months (New Zealand) but we diid ZOOM most days which helped ! Separation is the hardest WORD ! Physical contact is so so important when you*re just newly engaged ! It would be even harder now we are married and have tasted the JOYS of intimacy ! For an ENGLISH (& American ?) TRIOLET the rhyme pattern shouuld be ABa Aab AB the one you have posted is ABc Acc AB but it doesnt matter there is always POETIC LICENSE even in Classic Poetic Forms ! The important thing ina TRIOLET and a VILLNELLE is the REPETITION ~ OK !
Love the VISUAL ~ DREAMY !
Blessings & Joy & Peace to You & Yours
Con Amor A & B & El Gato Ahumido 💛💛💛
Thanks Angela; the original was a perfect triolet, then I found this lovely image, in the process, I changed the wording and forgot the rhyme pattern! Thanks again ! Separation is truly hard, glad you and Brian found a way to keep your love nourished!
Take care,
as a man of my word, as a rule, I vow never to make em ...
however, if you have ever been let down ma'am feel free to point me in his direction ...
... if you reckon its a triolet, then its a triolet .... Nice un R B 🙂
Thanks dear; Sir gallant Neville, Honorable is a valuable asset, while vows are great for some, keeping true to your words is just fine
Triolet or not this write about vows raises many a question in the hearts of those who are waiting........ a compelling read my friend.
Thanks Fay! Trust is as important as vows, one without the other is no good,
Vows, promises, etc.. They are meant, only as long as their intent. It's like a contact with unlimited loopholes. If gone, he probably had to go, and I'm sure he felt justified.
Your poem depicts a much too common occurrence, the breaking of a promise or vow. The way in which you presented it is clever and your words ask all the right questions. Enjoyed reading this one. - Phil A.
Distance can be so hard between lovers. Great write RB.
Andy
Thank you kindly Andy, so true
truly captured the duality that exists in the remnants of broken (though rarely - if ever: completely) love,
it is strange how your words from both voices resonate: maybe I have played both roles in the past (though not in terms of vows, merely promises and assurances)? I relate with the need to linger in what nostalgic reverie remains, while wondering how the other could have changed (so much) and left all these feelings of raw intoxicating wonder - behind,
a beautiful interpretation of feelings we all know far too intimately, delivered with such simple elegance
Thank you kindly! Thanks for sharing your thoughts in the matter, and your compliments,
Best to you
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