Blue Light
Thanks to the blue light
She missed the vein in her arm
By a stroke of luck
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Author:
Neville (
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- Comment from author about the poem: ... Although a strict 5 7 5 this may not be what it might first appear to be ... However, no emergency services are necessarily involved .. necessarily .. haiku for looking :)
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First Goldy and now another 575 - I really must write more of these - love this one Neville.
.............................................. Haiku Michael, arigato for now zen 🙂
Ohh themes like this make me shudder.
I heard some things at a self-help group - some in 'worse' or deeper problems than me.
If she cut the blue (vein) would it be so bad as cutting the red (artery)? Veins take blood back to the heart; arteries take them away from the heart. This is how I see this. Bit of biology there!
I was a brain surgeon once, ya know. I couldn't find some brains. They were pea-sized in some folk. I mean, separate from the pituitary gland, which is pea-sized, I think. Staggers back in amazement at my dazzling knowledge?! lol.
You are a teensy bit warm Orchidee .. nowt to do with biology or physiology at all, or peas for that matter though ... feel free to keep trying ... it aint easy .. just you mark my ..
Apart from concluding the obvious I confess I am all at sea with this intriguing 5 7 5 Nev. - -- I maybe obtuse but its message keeps needling me - - a really good haiku but hey - - give me a clue .......................x
I'm with Fay here......... give us a clue darlin'.......... that said, it was a fine bunch of neatly placed words and I will try a haiku thanks to you...........
a gentleman never tells but since I am hardly one of those .. I might just whisper the answer to ya 🙂
Arithmetic and poetry should be kept on separate pages... grrrrr
quite silly really
now i come to think of it
a haiku hola
absolutely bloomin true ... arithmetic & poetry should be kept as you say .. I guess strictly speaking, this is a faikhu ................. in blue 🙂
It’s good the lights blue
But was it flashing on off
Hope it was stable.
Andy
the one's I am referring to are stable .. but it aint got nowt to do with horses neither sir .. thanks tho'
Neville,
A very interesting and
intriguing poem...
as most of your writings are.
Hmmm...
Perhaps that ‘stroke of luck’
of missing
‘the vein in her arm’
was due to her poor vision.
Laura🌻
....................... thank you Laura .. you are certainly warmer than most so far .. .... 🌻
Well certainly sounds ,
Psychedelic devil den,
Someone shooting up ,
Haiku Guess , lol
...................You are now as warm as Laura .. on the write track .. thank you for participating RB 🙂
there is a gross side to me that reads your words and hints at the use of the 'blue' in the light of her arm that just saved itself from a stroking injury - vein, by sheer luck,
I will refuse to verify any meaning to my meandering wonderings on this erm 'touchy' topic...
and to think you utilised the purest of poetic nature for your chosen form, oh the ancient's would've blown their haiku veins 🤦♂️
you are very near the mark L.B .. very close indeed .. and for that alone, I salute ya ... this by the way is a faikhu .. a poetic form I have been trying to get accepted into the halls of poetic academia for quite a few years ... in effect haiku in syllable count but not adhering at least always to other ancient laws ................................ Neville
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