Fay Slimm.

Left Behind.

 

Left Behind.

 

Dusk closes in

.............. .....except for a patch

in the mist's western bank

...................... which still shines

like a piece of daytime

..............................left behind

by some accident.

Comments9

  • orchidee

    Yes, some summer nights it hardly seemed to get dark at all. Good write Fay.

  • L. B. Mek

    I like the spacing, reemphasises the wondrously dramatic nuances in normality - being conveyed so eloquently in your write

  • Goldfinch60

    Those patches of light can be so uplifting Fay.

    Andy

  • Lorna

    I see so much in short pieces and this one hits the spot! This was the end of so many beautiful days that I remember......

    • Fay Slimm.

      Great to know the read prodded you memories Lorna - - and thanks too for adding the piece to your list of favourites.

    • The Uneducated O.A.P

      There's nothing more beautiful than days brightness disappearing below seas calm waters.
      Nice shorty. No, I'm not calling you shorty, lol

      • Fay Slimm.

        Ha ha -- well I am just that - "short but sweet" as my Gran used to say - - thanks Bill for your visit to read A Patch and glad you enjoyed it.

      • dusk arising

        An act of nature, gifted to you to marvel upon. Just as is some poetry when it tickles the aroma of a sensation we struggle to put into words.

        Magical moments, how strange they are overlooked by so many. Are we poets tainted with a sight beyond or is it a sight within, there again does it matter, we are just tainted.

      • ANGELA & BRIAN

        Good Afternoon FAY - Angela Here - No more clients today - so I am relaxing with a Cup of Earl Grey and catching up on MPS. Love the POEM & the Spaceing - for emphasis & pausing ! I love the Sunsets in New Zealand ~ Days were always reluctant to yield fully to Night ! No POEM today but we have one ready *In Defence of Wasps* for tomorow ~ AMEN !

        Blessings & Joy & Peace with LOVE
        Angela - Brian - Smokey 💛💛💛

      • blue orchid

        dion and always do love a beautiful sunset beautiful write fay

      • Michael Edwards

        A ray of light - it should be called a Fay of light - you bring the sunshine with this gem.

        • Fay Slimm.

          Ah - - - how kind and thank you sincerely dear Michael for this lovely comment on Left Behind. - - - these unexpected pockets of light when dusk falls never cease to amaze my poet's mind.



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