L. B. Mek

Unruly

Seek no perfectionist’s grammar, to entice

as melted butter on your reading platter

nor, those snug-fit - sharp-edged rhyme structures, to hum

tap-count to and amuse, your melodic whims

within our creativity’s: freshly discovered corridors

of instinctively prickly individuality.

 

Instead, we

children of formless family-tree’s

deliver our generation’s melodies, intertwined

in matrimonially:

                       divorced ideals

within lilting lines of unruly symmetry.

 

crudely brutish: velvet spiked flow

bold minimalist: tectonic jarring empathy

stereotype capitulating: purposed integrity

 

 

© L. B. Mek

December 2019

Comments8

  • dusk arising

    Yep. Totally agree. Make the point rather than the rhyme.

    • L. B. Mek

      thought you would agree, ultimately it all comes down to what works best for us I think,
      the canvas is blank and Ink: our last bastion of true freedom
      thanks for the support

      • dusk arising

        I sometimes use simple rhyme but i do notice it does two things to my writing. Firstly it restricts my vocabulary, which is limited enough already, when i need to use only words which rhyme and secondly it can make a serious subject sound rather twee or nursery rhyme-ish.
        I think most, but not all by any means, mature writers accept that there is no need for rhyme nor format these days.
        I have a personal dislike for those prescribed formats of lines one, two and three having to be five, seven and five syllables etc. Arithmetic and poetry are best kept well apart in my head.... but i'm only a solitary voice in the wilderness and would not like to be seen as making demands or setting rules.

      • Fay Slimm.

        Top drawer writing on need for true self-expression when composing perception in poetic versing. A favourite for sure my friend.

        • L. B. Mek

          wow, as always I am humbled at gaining recognition from a Poet of your authentic calibre Fay,
          thank you for the encouragement and support

        • orchidee

          Oohh, I must have me metres (usually) and me melodic whims.
          They're only whims. I get arrested for false pretences of singing! They say it's two cats fighting, and disturbs the peace. lol.

          • L. B. Mek

            'two cats screeching', sadly that's a description I know far too well - but hey at least we try, lol
            I have no problem with rhyme schemes - so long as they don't dictate a writer's word choices to the land's of the cringe worthy and I'm not reading banana's and sultana's as couplet end rhymes to a poem on Dracula... lol,
            thanks for the support and keeping things light-hearted as always

            • orchidee

              Yes, an in rhyme, we can use poetic licence, sort of say things back to front, such as: 'Back to front say things can we!' I wish I would shut up waffling and write some poetry. lol.

            • Romantic Bloom

              Awe my dear if I had the extensive divine vocabulary as yours,
              then perhaps free Verse would spill from my tongue, but alas,
              You are a divine writer! I usually have rhymes in my head, though
              I have discovered new poetic forms for which I like try out,

              • L. B. Mek

                as a fan of your writing, which I have expressed in my comments of your poems: rhyme schemes - in the hands of the talented produce astounding poetry, no dispute!
                as Fay Slimm pointed out, my feeble effort in this write is merely trying to convey my belief that we writer's are best served prioritising the voice and message being communicated in a write/poem: above, our adherence to the rules in chosen poetry forms,
                thanks for the encouragement and support

                • Romantic Bloom

                  Awe thank you kindly for a most wonderful
                  Comment! I appreciate your most gracious
                  words!! Smiling big time!!

                  Best to you dear Sir!!

                • Goldfinch60

                  So true and well written LB, we use our words to put our feelings and thoughts onto the paper, sometimes they fall into rhythm and rhyme but that is just we feel as the ink goes onto the paper.

                  Andy

                  • L. B. Mek

                    exactly Andy, perfectly surmised
                    thanks

                  • Audax

                    Truly amazing and well written! Love it!

                    • L. B. Mek

                      glad you are back, hope you had a refreshing/rejuvenating break,
                      thanks for the support and encouragement

                    • Michael Edwards

                      What a superb structure to this meangful write.

                      • L. B. Mek

                        thank you Michael!
                        hope all goes well for Jeanne today, you will both be in my thoughts

                        • Michael Edwards

                          Thank you so much.

                        • Neville


                          I am write there beside you my friend ... this art, this craft of ours is big enough to encompass all styles and forms... but I know which of them I favour ............... you have just posted a very important post on a very important topic .......................... N



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