Fay Slimm.

Awesome

 

 

Awesome.

Portentous is storm.
Thick and heavy this afternoon air
projects an impending doom everywhere.
Frightening is lightning.
Leaving a film on withering green
it alters the sheen of pooled dew in each leaf.
Numbing is thunder
Wide but blueless the sky-scape here
warily waits as pregnant with wet, gale threatens.
Awful is louring mauve.
Suddenly rumbling sounds, decibel-loud
and clashing drowns voices of scurrying crowd.
I see a large tree shaking prior to
the strike,
speedy
zig-zag
as its line
decapitates,
slashing at
old spalted
oaken core,
strips it bare,
groaning the
trunk heaves,
smoking oak
sighs as skin
splits and
bark rips while
trembling leaves
slide into heated
inferno of gorging fire
hits the floor and roots weep
as tree shudders once and it dies. 

Awesome is white- forked lightning.

Comments11

  • Teddy.15

    Beyond awesome striking imagery and poetry.

    • Fay Slimm.

      Bless you Teddy and thank you for the visit and comment on Awesome.

    • Neville


      awesome indeed in both word & form

      no doubt about it .. that's a POETREE 🙂

      • Fay Slimm.

        Smiling as I read the new name you invented mon ami for my prose- piece - a Poetree is just what I hoped readers would see. Very pleased you liked the form - spent too much time making it look right but turned out a fairly good shape - - - thanking you muchly as always...........x

      • L. B. Mek

        Brilliant!
        your words sparkled into life
        with undefeatable zest, form to line
        testifying
        to that majestic quality of Nature's power!
        a great read, dear Fay
        and aesthetically so enthralling, great use
        of poetry's tools
        to reinforce your worded imagery
        insuring you engage your readers, even more

        • Fay Slimm.

          Dear L.B. - -- How truly kind your comment on Awesome - and so thrilled you liked the form. Thank you for dropping by and for all your generous support.

        • Jerry Reynolds

          Awesome read, Fay.
          The shape was well played.

          • Fay Slimm.

            Ah - - thanks Jerry - -- that was my intention to try for a shape resembling the tree doomed to be taken down by lightning.

          • Accidental Poet

            Awesome is an understatement Fay.

            • Fay Slimm.

              Thanks for your kind in-put A.P. - -- the thought of a beautiful tree hit by lightning seemed enough for a go at shape-shifting lines as tribute to nature's awesomeness.

            • dusk arising

              Such poetic fruit from your storm tree. Dare i shelter neath such a majestic stalwart, no indeed not under skies darkened with your verse. I'd seek a more welcoming spot hoping for a cuppa.

              Great imagery and cleverly, nay pleasingly, presented.

              • Fay Slimm.

                And a stormful of thank yous for even attempting to shelter 'neath branches attacked by such hellish forces dear Dusk. - -- sending you a special cuppa laced with genuine appreciation for your generous comment on Awesome.

              • Neil Higgins

                Am in Stratford-upon-Avon today.Yes really.With family members.Feel at home reading your work here Fay.
                Just saying.

                • Fay Slimm.

                  Wow - Thank you so much for this special in-put Neil - -- what a wealth of historical interest that place represents as I well remember. An honour indeed for my work to be read in world-famous Stratford - - - hope you had a fabulous time viewing the Olde Bard's treasures.

                • SureshG

                  An unexpected imagery, but your composition though did strike me with an intensity of a lightening bolt.

                  Decades ago, I wrote on the subject of how humans may have discovered ’fire’, and concluded on the same analogy.

                  • Fay Slimm.

                    Great that the read of Awesome struck similar chords in your memory Suresh -- the force of fire in lightning must be tragic for trees or anything living that receive its tremendous power.

                  • Saxon Crow

                    Personally I always come alive in a thunderstorm. Nothing but empowering feelings. Great poem Fay

                  • Doggerel Dave

                    R.I.P. old oak –You went down in a blaze of glory memorialized in beautiful effortless (‘doubt that – Ed) verse which ensures your immortality.
                    Great stuff, Fay.

                  • Goldfinch60

                    Wonderful, striking words Fay, but I can see the tree is still there.

                    Andy



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