I have read so many poems
Since I joined My Poetic Side
It's been good fun and amazing
A great and joyous ride
There are many different styles
Written by old and newer members
I've put them in my files
And given them some numbers
My problem is MY poems
I HAVE to make them rhyme!
They seem so juvenile
And superficial every time
I tried to change my ways
Seemed to work for just 2 lines
Then back I went again
Rhyming 'kinds' with 'finds' or 'minds'!
I will always keep on trying
To do my level best
To show some depth and beauty
So there is now no time to rest.
I started writing poems during these Covid lockdowns. But my brain seems comfortable only in a direct simple rhyming way! MPS has shown me there is so much more. I think I'd be allowed by MPS to share my daughter's poem (a proud mum!) - she wrote it when she was 17 (13 years ago). She's busy working overseas but has given me permission to share it.
Art
the writer should not be forced
to write,
nor the poet
to rhyme.
the dancer must dance
of her own free will;
liberated,
rather than restricted.
the singer must sing
with her heart,
and the painter can paint
not darkness but colour;
not blackness but light.
the musician should not be bound
by the notes of his melody,
nor the sculptor
by his lifeless statue.
the observer must look
beyond the mere art,
to even get a glimpse
of the hidden meaning,
for does the lover not
love from within?
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Rozina (
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I especially love the last verse .
I hardly ever rhyme ..
we can write how we wish , don’t have to follow a certain way 🙂
Thank you for that yellowrose.
you ask a perfectly valid question encapsulated so well
within the fabric of a poem .. bloomin heck, r bloomin hell ......................my guess is there are no absolute rongs or writes ...................... N 🙂
Thank you.
Two superb pieces and of course there is no need to rhyme. In fact there are no rules in poetry - write from either your heart or your funny bone - or better still from both - and you'll be okay.
Good advice. Thank you.
Two poems for the price of one from two generations. Try free style poetry it is so relaxing.
I shall try. Thank you.
If poetry was only rhyming
Then I guess I was out of league
But I guess it’s about true feels
The poetry by your daughter is a jewel
Like a jeweller she recognises the true jewels, strings them together and makes a beautiful painting
So poignant
Thank you. I will forward your lovely response to her poem. I’m hoping she will share her poems at MPS when she has more free time.
Thank you very much. I’m so proud of her.
As you are aware I very rarely rhyme as I have my own way of expressing the things I want to say. You are doing so well Rozina.
Your daughter's poem is so very true, we must be ourselves and do things our own way.
Andy
Thank you.
I love the rhyming but yes a true poet can create a poem that doesnt necessarily rhyme but has depth and tells a story, now thats a gift 🙂
Thank you. One day....
I meant your poems are great, they say a lot about you, a story and have depth, sorry if i didnt make it clear, i meant you have already achieved a high standard with your poetry, you have a natural gift, which is very unique, well done dear poet 🙂
I think you write as you feel.
If it rhymes, your brain is working harder. It's a mood thing, I think.
I guess whatever we are most comfortable with. I tried the free flowing style but my poem was unreal. I didn't put on any soothing background music to get the right mood and atmosphere though...
Both poems are quite beautiful...each in their own distinct style. I understand your frustration with rhyming, i have felt it myself more than once.
Thank you from both of us.
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