Like the sun foreshadowing a terror
With every shot from its coronal loops
I too get uneasy when I’m bitter
Like Venus, planet of love and
Abundant light
I too can be showy – but obviously tawdry
Like the moon who’s only doing is to
Circuit through a course with no end
I too am used.
But the only one who I am ever truly reminiscent of
Is a fading star
With its growth from the nursery (stellar nebula)
to zenith (a star)
It is at its peak
But when the fuel of life begins to seep – BOOM! (Planetary nebula)
It is only as vigorous as it was when it
wasn’t even born
lifeless – I too.
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Author:
Rocky Lagou (
Offline) - Published: February 1st, 2022 14:25
- Comment from author about the poem: Feel free to give feedback. My first poem.
- Category: Reflection
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Comments4
A very unique write
Could feel travelling the starry night
A good usage of imagery
I visited the planetary
A very dear topic of my heart
Welcome to MPS dear poet
Thanks for sharing
And keep penning
Omg I could literally cry 😄 - my first comment! Thanks so much. I literally have a book of poetry to publish waiting in a Word doc and then I came across this website while looking up places to publish some of my poetry and it's limited to one per day 💔. But as they say, "patience is a virtue."
Surely that’s the rule but it’s a good one
So that everyone can have say
Happy posting as you stay
This is such a cool piece Rocky. And that one a day rule has a loophole. Just post 2 poems in one shot. I did once. I called it "2 4 1 deal/a loophole" I think it's on page 5 of all my poems. Cheers🍻
Thanks so much for the feedback! I'm glad you enjoyed the piece, I wrote it over a year ago and was the first poem I've ever written. I may try that recommendation as well, a "two in one" sounds interesting. Stay safe! 🌟👍
Wow what a trip I'll be sure to pop back for more!
Keep up the write
Much peace and respect
Thanks so much Dan! I'm glad you enjoyed this fond poem of mine! Can't wait to see more from you! 😉💖
I really like your style of writing, the single lines and that you add words in paranthesis. It gives your work a unique touch and, in a way, creates more room for interpretation even though or maybe because it gives the reader something new to hold onto.
Thank you so much Junia! I'm actually low-key ecstatic right now after finally having someone appreciate the syntax and format of my poems. I'm glad that you took it into consideration when reading this beloved poem of mine. I try to create art that is not only interesting but also multifaceted. Thanks for the love! 💖😊
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